Y.. A Deep Valley Poem by Aufie Zophy
Y.. A Deep Valley
A valley, unfathomably deep
It's dark, it's cold; bitter tears I weep
Is there a way up, is there a way out?
Should I be quiet or just start to shout?
I'm lost in the labyrinth of being worried
Engulfed in self pity I am almost buried
Monstrous dinosaurs of hatred surround me
My ego's nasty revenge has not yet found thee
I want to get out at any cost
The more I fume, the more I am lost
A hopeless jungle of feeling bad
The situation just drives me mad
Until finally,
I come across the path of love
Leading to somewhere high above
A path created by wisdom of Saints
It seems to be free of all restraints
I start to follow this path of unconditional love,
Away from this valley, I want so much to get out of
Worry and hatred are left behind
Bye, deep valley, I have freed my mind
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Note:
This poem is about one hour or so I spent in nature in solitude
soon after a very disheartening verbal encounter
with one of my teenage sons whom I love soooo much.
Really, love is our God's way......
In a catch-22 or in a dilemma, we looking for a path everywhere as we are in trouble... The path of wisdom, the path of love and the path of His way may lead us to a land, where we'll be free... Wonderful poem, , , so inspirational and spiritual....i like the last two lines..that line will be the line of a victor...
Good poem, true dear friend keep love and smiles alive, I know will come a time you will both have great laugh at those days.
The bitter reality of life; but with a good resolve. A beautiful poem of consolation and hope. My best to you and your son.
The Note add more greatest feeling and i was like ' God, i like this piece so much'...i like the tone from beginning to the end, it's amazing how you pull it that way...Passionate, love, solitude and attitudes are so striking here..It's great write :) Keep it up! ! ! ! _Unwritten Soul
(cont.) to MyPoemList! ! another one. no stinker, this! ! ! i'd say you were in a temporary depression. that has happened to me as well. i did not lose love for someone, but i thought i might lose love from someone! there is now a special area for Poet's Notes, but i'm glad you placed it immediately after the poem text, & labeled as: - Note: bravo! bri ;)
2nd stanza: thee refers to? maybe i'll find out if i finish reading the poem? Yes! the path of (unconditional) love. congratulations! ! may you always remain on the 'right' path, and never, EVER, sink again into the unfathomly deep valley. (cont.)
I just think why was i so late in reaching to read this poem..... But now since i have read it.. I can say its an experience and adventure that is served via this poem.. The words are so Crisp that does not leave you from completing reading and the mind asks.. now whats next.. and then we have the last verse so Pleasant... Simply love this...10
I am so glad to hear the end. Yes that is the secret of life. Find peace, respect to the other person, love and know that everything works for good, no matter what it is. I had only one child, possibly because I could not handle more. You are a wise father I respect you to the highest.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/26/2024 6:43:56 PM # 1.0.0.1119
great write, nice poem to read with the rhyme scheme