Bri Edwards

Gold Star - 9,642 Points (some time ago / Earth, i believe)

Soldier Recruiting [come On God! ].........[an Informal Recruiting Session, Overheard] - Poem by Bri Edwards

I'm sitting in a coffee house,
an outcast from my home.
I brought pen and paper,
and I'll let my mind now roam.

In walk two young men with a.....
third man, still young....but older.
The third man is dressed in camouflage;
he is a U.S. Army soldier.
They sit not far from me, where I......
can hear......much of what they say.
The soldier is pitching that, for a bright future,
the Army is the way......
to go.

The words PAY, BENEFITS, and RETIREMENT,
and TRAVEL I do hear,
but what I don't hear are the words:
WAR, KILLING, DEATH, ...........and FEAR.
[Well sure not all soldiers get involved directly....
with fighting for a living.
And I know, for many people, military service.....
is considered patriotic giving.]

{I think now they're discussing paintball wars,
practice for wars more real.
Damn it! If God were such a great leader,
why couldn't PEACE, not War.......be the Daily Deal? }

(June 26,2013)
(revised October 13,2013)


Poet's Notes about The Poem

i tell the story as it happened while i drank orange juice and ate biscotti. i got let back into the house later.

Comments about Soldier Recruiting [come On God! ].........[an Informal Recruiting Session, Overheard] by Bri Edwards

  • Veteran Poet - 1,955 Points Elena Sandu (11/19/2014 1:03:00 AM)

    I don't use to ask people to read me but if you feel like and have time please see my poem peace, lol, had to go through all of my poems to find it . It could complete your saying and it may show of how much I approve and appreciate this truthful poem. Always wondered how is it possible for the youth to be interdicted alcohool and tobaco till 21 but are allowed to hold guns and go to war much earlier? Heart broken for the poor kids, thank you for bringing awareness. (Report) Reply

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  • Veteran Poet - 1,844 Points Noreen Carden (11/6/2013 6:27:00 AM)

    Why not indeed.Enjoyed reading this. So glad you got back into the house. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 899 Points Ramesh T A (10/28/2013 5:06:00 AM)

    Recruiting soldier is another form of employment to earn money! It's a killing business! Your question at the end -why couldn’t PEACE, not War.......be the Daily Deal? should kindle thoughts on peace in the minds of men for good! Wish to see that day......! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 432 Points Danny Draper (10/18/2013 5:18:00 AM)

    An excellent write. Witty, cynical and insightful a perfect mix in equal measure. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, October 13, 2013

Poem Edited: Sunday, August 10, 2014


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