Shahzia Batool

Rookie - 603 Points (Pakistan)

A Glance!


(Inwards!)
Standing upon the deck of life
When I see inwards I feel myself
Like a flower, wild and uncared for
This burns with care and blooms when neglected
Obliged I am, to all never bothering to know me
The credit of my present being
Goes to the two kinds of friends,
those, who could never understand me,
Those, who always took me in the wrong;

(Seawards!)
When the soul perishes
In a shipwreck of feelings capsized and sunk
Lower and deeper never to get washed up
The being looks like null and void
When the mind is oblivious of smiles and cries
When you stop caring for the cherished smile
Displayed on lips,
missing the pet sick chic, or a stolen doll, or
recalling the first ever tears shed
On the first foolish crush of the carefree childhood
Can one survive such a shipwreck?

(Sunwards!)
Carrying new dawns in your lap
Your paleness is not justified
You witness the tears, the terror all day long
Is it the reason why you’re pale and sad and lost?
Do not deceive me,
Marking the end of the dark night
Tomorrow again you’ll be up and about
Quite upbeat
Like a glowing, glistening face of a ready, happy child
On his willing roads to school
- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -
The tears and the terror are but the half-truth!

Submitted: Sunday, May 18, 2014

Topic of this poem: life


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Comments about this poem (A Glance! by Shahzia Batool )

  • Gold Star - 18,960 Points Chinedu Dike (9/3/2014 1:39:00 PM)

    My favourite line is The tears and the terror are but the half-truth. Keep it up. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 2,864 Points Patricia Grantham (7/8/2014 2:32:00 PM)

    A very good mind blowing piece and a good discourse on the ups and
    owns of life. Written with much concern and convictions. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,688 Points S.zaynub Kamoonpuri (7/5/2014 6:55:00 AM)

    Wow it wud be real hard for me to write such impresive metaphor. Kudos!
    And ramazan mbaruk Shahzia. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 7,810 Points Khalida Bano Ali (6/30/2014 7:34:00 PM)

    An encourthey are in dander there.agin poem for girls who want to go to school but (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 415 Points Yasmeen Khan (6/24/2014 2:26:00 AM)

    It's a profound poem written in highly metaphorical language. On the deck of life we see around or inside to understand our selves. You bloom when not cared for? May be it's better not to be understood at all rather than being misunderstood. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 7,536 Points Geetha Jayakumar (6/22/2014 11:27:00 AM)

    Heartfelt poem indeed. You have described the three phases beautifully. This is definitely a fact of life. No day is ever same. We can never make one understand or it can be taken in other way too, they understood but their ego never allows them to give up...One has to survive such a shipwreck, because there is no choice left. Each dawn should be filled like happy school going children's innocence. Beautiful way you have put the three different phases of life. Loved it. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 17,104 Points Valsa George (6/1/2014 11:52:00 PM)

    Yes, tears and terror are but half truths! The sun that looks pale, sad and lost today will emerge bright and up beat the next dawn.... This is true of life too! From agony and distress, we will come into the light of cheer and delight... We can survive even a shipwreck.... may be we'll be marooned for sometime in a desolate island to be rescued later.... A poem with roots boring deep into the innards of one's being! Touching write! (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 6,614 Points Amitava Sur (5/25/2014 7:09:00 AM)

    A nice poem in three diff. states..... loved it (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 11,684 Points Ramesh Rai (5/25/2014 4:14:00 AM)

    A powerful write by a powerful pen.
    Three aspects of life have been crafted with enormous thoughts and emotion. well done sister. God bless. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 4,668 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (5/23/2014 6:59:00 AM)

    The tears and the terror are but the half-truth!
    Periods of despair and agony are captured in powerful lines. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,554 Points Dinesh Nair (5/21/2014 4:13:00 AM)

    Just a glance but many views! The poem is a portrait of sketches unusually but convincingly drawn across the canvas of a poetic reach that enlightens and elaborates a lot. (Report) Reply

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