When I was just a little girl
They brought me to the sea
I waded out as waves unfurled
Their salty gifts on me
Seaweed, shells and whole sand dollars
Were strewn along the shores
Each a gem of ocean wonders
Formed on soft sea floors
As years flew by and she grew tall
She never lost her passion
Most nights she'd hear the ocean call
And dreamt of wild waves crashing
The sea girl couldn't shake the call
Salt water coursed her veins
Returning to the old sea wall
She felt her heart unchained
Miles and miles of endless sea
It took her breath away
The blue, the blue, oh it does scheme
To drive one quite insane
Thunderous and angry waves
They threw themselves ashore
The aqua hues grew dark and grey
The rain drops she ignored
She ran down to the water
And lay upon the sand
The pleasure that this brought her
Caused rain and tears to blend
The drumming of the thunder
Became a distant song
Soon there was just a murmur
The raging storm was gone
When she awoke and gazed about
She found herself entwined
Seaweed and shells her form did tout
Gems from the sea, her finds
some of my favorites: Each a gem of ocean wonders Formed on soft sea floors .....wild waves crashing' The blue, the blue, oh it does scheme To drive one quite insane Caused rain and tears to blend Seaweed and shells her form did flout Gems from the sea, her finds ============================= i HAD to look up flout to decide if i liked it. i'd like its synonym disregard in the poem even more, even though it doesn't rhyme with about. - - - - - - - - flout flout/ verb verb: flout; 3rd person present: flouts; past tense: flouted; past participle: flouted; gerund or present participle: flouting openly disregard (a rule, law or convention) . these same companies still flout basic ethical practices synonyms: defy, refuse to obey, disobey, break, violate, fail to comply with, fail to observe, contravene, infringe, breach, commit a breach of, transgress against; ignore, disregard countless retailers flout the law by selling cigarettes to children antonyms: observe archaic mock; scoff. the women pointed and flouted at her BUT THAT'S THE ONLY THING WHICH KEPT ME FROM THOROUGHLY ENJOYING THE POEM, and i had decided to send it to MyPoemList even before i finished reading. i did notice a switch from first person narration to third person narration, but i could live with that, and i might even like it. yes, i like it! - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - this is a great poem! the rhymes i will call imperfect, but i liked them very much. there was some way words rhymed while not exactly rhyming. very nice. if you had tried to rhyme with what i would call exact rhyming, the poem would probably NOT be SO GOOD! bri :)
Bri, originally she had LAID in verse seven. I suggested that she should change it to LAY, which she did. So the way it is now is perfect, not wrong at all.
Beautiful poem...! I am moved and have to read it again and again.
I love this poem! I have given it five stars and made it one of my favorites!
Beautiful. So very endearingly emotional. But the transit from First Person to Third Person is left unexplained…
This is beautiful poetic expression of beautiful expression vof emotional bond to sea. A very magnificent piece full of experience stupendous. Well penned.
What a lovely poem! The sea has so much of treasure to offer the world. A mesmerizing world full of colourful sea shells, sea weeds, gems and pearls. We must have a keen desire to see the wonders of the vast ocean and eyes that can spot these wonderful gifts of nature. Loved your poem, dear beach Girl......10
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I really like this poem, although I have to agree with Bri Edwards about the use of the word FLOUT. It doesn't really make sense as used here. Also, in the second line of verse seven, you should use LAY instead of LAID. Sorry, I can't help it. I used to be an English teacher. Great work, however! Keep writing.
I see that she has made both changes that you suggested. Good work, former English teacher!