The Golden Elixir Poem by Beach Girl
The Golden Elixir
The she creature rose
From depths of the darkness
And smoothly swam
To the brambled banks
There in the moonlight
The gold bottle beckoned
And glistening with water
She stepped from the lake
Her tawny hand, grasped
The round amber bottle
And bowing her head
Inhaled the mixture
Citrus and spices
Danced in the darkness
And tears from the trees
Escaped the elixir
The amber spoke
Of tales from the past
And balsam of twigs
Poured out her heart
The nymph from the lake
Danced in the darkness
This golden elixir
Would ne're from her part
nere [with no apostrophe] Definitions from the GNU version of the Collaborative International Dictionary of English Were not. from The Century Dictionary and Cyclopedia A Middle English form of near. An obsolete contracted form of never. n. A Middle English form of neer. n. A Middle English contraction of ne were, were not. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Her tawny hand grasped The round amber bottle And bowing her head [............without a comma between bowing and her, OR changing some words, it almost sounds like the tawny hand was doing the inhaling.] Inhaled the mixture - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - do you find all of your fragrances on brambled banks (a nice alliteration) ? - - - - - - - - banks/lake; mixture/elixir; heart/part............... your rhyming got better as you went along. :) - - - - - - - - - - - - - i think i would rearrange the last stanza a bit, and i would always use punctuation, but i DO like the poem. thanks for sharing. bri :) add enough chocolate and i might go for it!
The nymph from the lake no poetic nymph born after 2014 o beach girl u have never read me i compose only on girls lovely beachy but i c u don't reply any
Wonderful............................... 100000 You may like to read my poems and express your views too..... Naila
Oh thats awesome to know how fragrance can inspire you, when i read it i imagine of fantasy like a dreamy inspired and thats cool to know fragrance does magic to your pen. Personally scent always give great door to revisit past memory.. :)
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4/16/2024 7:00:29 AM # 1.0.0.1119
Lovely poem. Are you not writing anymore? This is your newest poem, and it's from last August. Please come back and write some more!