Bri Edwards

Bronze Star - 5,586 Points (some time ago / Earth, i believe)

'In-N-Out, Fast Food Stop........ [Waiting For A Ride At A Restaurant; Simple Pleasures; Unruly Kids In Public; A Bit Of Humor; SHORT]


Though my “love” says it’s a bad place to wait,
here I am with two milks. Only milk, no plate.

She doesn’t mean it’s a dangerous place; that she doesn’t mean.
The staff is courteous, the milk is good, and the place is surely clean.
So far, an unruly little boy is all I have to complain about.
If I had my way I’d give him a little swat, then I’d kick him OUT!

(Jan.2013)

Submitted: Friday, June 07, 2013
Edited: Thursday, August 01, 2013

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In-N-Out in san carlo california was where i chose to wait for a ride from an auto dealer shuttle vehicle to take me to the next town to retrieve my vehicle. there was a mix-up and i waited there a LONG time but enjoyed writing poetry, drinking milk, and watching people.

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  • Gold Star - 15,145 Points John Westlake (11/3/2014 4:44:00 PM)

    I'd give the kid more than a swat, but that's just me. At least the staff seemed nice and if the milk was good, all the better. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 159 Points Ellias Aghili (6/9/2013 10:28:00 AM)

    Very nice. if i was you, for sure i couldn't do this action, i mean writing poem while doing other things, but it gives a nice feeling. ha ha ha, what has that little boy done that you wanted to offer him a swat? so cute Bri. you know how the manage the words correctly. i always look at your works as a pattern for my (weak) poetry.
    well done (Report) Reply

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