Bri Edwards

Gold Star - 8,398 Points (some time ago / Earth, i believe)

A Lonely Cloud.....[nature Observation; Humor] - Poem by Bri Edwards

I saw a lonely cloud one day.
It looked small beyond the Bay.
I tried to find a second and failed,
even though I looked each way.

Think of it! A single cloud.
Its loneliness spoke to me aloud.
I wonder how it felt up there.
Was it very proud?

A rarity I think it was;
like an active bee with no buzz;
like a single potato chip;
like a peach skin with no fuzz.

Like one firefighter at a fire;
a solitary pigeon on a wire;
a Facebook member with no 'friend';
a single member in a choir.

It's like an Easter basket with one egg;
a basketball star with one leg;
me with just one word to say;
a fraternity party with just one keg.

I guess you've come to realize by now
that when I saw that cloud I thought 'Wow! '.
If I'd been Adam, with Eve at my side,
to that small distant cloud I might bow.

(August 2012)


Poet's Notes about The Poem

I really did see a lonely cloud recently across San Francisco Bay.

Comments about A Lonely Cloud.....[nature Observation; Humor] by Bri Edwards

  • Gold Star - 15,505 Points John Westlake (11/7/2014 6:07:00 PM)

    I have seen a single cloud in the sky before but I will admit is does not happen often. Why bow to a cloud? ? It won't appreciate it. By the way a peach with no fuzz is a nectarine. An Easter basket will only have one egg in it at some point, because it will be the first one in or the last one out. Some Easter eggs are so huge that you can only fit one in a basket anyway. (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 8,398 Points Bri Edwards (9/27/2014 4:55:00 PM)

    OOPS! a mistake! ! ! and it is MINE! : It's loneliness spoke to me aloud.

    see it? ? it's been two years+ since i submitted this poem and now (as i was copying it in longhand for a friend who has no computer; i don't know how to make paper copies from this computer; besides, a handwritten note is nice to get in the mail.........unless it is a dear john letter) i found a mistake. i often point out 'mistakes' to other poets, including this same mistake. yes, i should have written Its, not It's. its is an example of the possessive form of one pronoun that does not use an apostrophe. bri :)

    it's means it is. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,116 Points Electric Lady (7/13/2014 1:04:00 AM)

    Wonderful poem. I love your brilliant use of words. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,716 Points Noreen Carden (2/27/2014 11:33:00 AM)

    Hey Bri like this nature poem no danger of lonely clouds here today they are big and black and back to back (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,726 Points Dinesh Nair (9/19/2013 3:50:00 AM)

    It often happens.. sometimes we too feel lonely like this cloud despite there being a crowd around us Bri.
    Your rendering skill [with this simple attitude to our nature] is astoundingly fascinating dear sir. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,597 Points Kanniappan Kanniappan (6/23/2013 10:06:00 PM)

    It is a wonderful poem with good imagination. I like it. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 22,256 Points Valsa George (5/13/2013 11:53:00 PM)

    A very unique poem on a unique phenomenon! A sky with just a speck of cloud... and such umpteen comparisons! Choosing the out of the ordinary themes and presenting them in a striking manner is something that makes your poems nonpareil! ! Greatly enjoyed! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 51 Points Brian Skyers (11/17/2012 3:36:00 PM)

    Another very inspirational poem, so many subjects around us...but we don't all see the same things..nice. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Femi Oloidi (10/28/2012 3:23:00 PM)

    I'm growing through the peom again, and am lost in this poem, and all I can say again is; Wow!
    Kingfemi (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Femi Oloidi (10/28/2012 3:22:00 PM)

    I'm growing through the peom again, and am lost in this poem, and all I can say again is; Wow!
    Kingfemi (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Femi Oloidi (10/28/2012 3:14:00 PM)

    All I can say is Wow! Lovely poem, I feel like huging d poem! lol.great work!
    Kingfemi (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, August 30, 2012

Poem Edited: Saturday, September 27, 2014


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