Revisited: When The Carousel Animals Got Loose.....[long; Humor; Fantasy; Adventure] Poem by Bri Edwards

Revisited: When The Carousel Animals Got Loose.....[long; Humor; Fantasy; Adventure]

Rating: 5.0


In the park for peoples' amusement……
were some workers with an accusement.
T'was on the merry-go-round
where they were all found,
feeling their labor was abusement.

These workers who labored without wages,
were taken from storybook pages.
They were most of them mild...
though some were beasts 'wild'.
Some were loved, some were feared, through the ages.

Three were birds, though one never could fly;
two, that could, rarely took to the sky.
Six of them were mammals...
though none were humped-camels.
One was make-believe, from days-gone-by.

All, including Elephant and Goose,
Unicorn, and big-antlered Moose,
Rooster and Lion,
Ostrich (not flyin') ,
Horse and Tiger, ...all wished to be loose.

Freedom from 'Go-Round' they had discussed.
Then one fine fall day it just seemed a must.
No people were in sight....
(a good time for their 'flight') .
That their plan would succeed, they all did trust.




Unicorn's horn worked Tiger's tether,
loosening its tight knot of leather.
Then Elephant's trunk tip
off Tiger's knot did rip.....
They freed Tiger, working together.

The first thing he did was flex his paws.
Then he freed all his friends, using sharp claws.
They took their bridles off.
Their saddles they did slough.
They stretched their stiff legs and tight jaws.

To be free, for them, was something new.
They'd not all yet thought what they would do.
They were free of their poles.
A bright sun warmed their souls.
Though not human, they'd have some fun too! ! !

Ms. Ostrich tried to fly, but in vain.
Then Rooster and Goose cried 'there's a plane! '
So Ms. Goose and sir Rooster
together did boost her.
And the three rode with Horse, the wind blowing his mane.

Getting off the ride, they were all woozy.
They agreed the ride was a doozy.
And while their five friends cavorted,
the four honked and snorted.
Then they lay in the shade for a snoozy.

' Tiger, let's ride the coaster' said Lion.
'I don't like planes, and I don't like flyin '.'
So while they both rolled along
Tiger sang an old song.
Lion held tight, but ended up cryin '.



Elephant sniffed the cart of peanut vendor.
The peanut smell to 'heaven' did 'send' her.
She ate nuts (shells and all)
till her appetite did fall,
then she rested against a truck fender.

The fantasy beast preferred popcorn,
so he opened the popper with his horn.
Then Unicorn washed his snack down
with a drink, colored brown,
in which floated marshmallows, 'newborn'.

In the Fun House Moose looked in mirrors (curved) .
Then through a dark maze Moose swerved.
Big Moose felt like a fool
when scared by a fake ghoul,
and she ran out of Fun House unnerved.



When their long day was nearly all done
They agreed they'd all had some fun.
Then as it was getting late
one of them tried lock on park gate,
but as a group they chose not to run.

Though freedom was nice for a while
they agreed they'd miss each bright smile…..
of each happy child-rider
and each grown up beside her.
So they all returned to 'go-round', single file.


(12-20-2006/revised 2012)

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
this is a lot better than it was before i revised it this year. hope you like it.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 24 February 2023

Come on people, get together, .....and READ THIS! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ;)))))))))))))))

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Bri Edwards 01 October 2022

I give five stars. ;))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) Someone has to.

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Cowboy Ron Williams 14 March 2022

A fun adventure, Bri! For you five stars, say I.

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Bri Edwards 17 April 2022

Thanks, pal. ;) bri

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Simone Inez Harriman 18 July 2018

Where are all the comments? I love this poem.....your word choice and a fascinating concept. This one goes straight to my favourites and a zillion 10's bestowed on your creative masterpiece.

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Bri Edwards 17 April 2022

I concur, Simone. WHERE are they? ? ? ! ! ! ;) bri

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Akhtar Jawad 18 December 2015

Dear Bri, I think there were more mammals, at least seven, enjoyed this interesting poem.

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