¥ Freedom ¥ Poem by VIPINS PUTHOORAN

¥ Freedom ¥

Rating: 3.1


The word that ignited my incombustile mind,
I raised then the marasmus jowl upward
And opened my sutured mouth.
Eyes were cascading the caged fervour
For freedom like pearls in a nacre.
Once slavery emasculated all my passion
For the vision of a feudalist.
He soured all my vigour, instituted in destitution;
Desecrated and eviscerated my abilities
And stabbed on my cranium,
With the tapering embers of his hate.
Like a mimosa I was trembled by the melliepede legs
Of myriad blood sucking vampires,
Under their powerful calcaneum my entire calibre was treaded.
Like a lunatic they enchained me in the fortress of slavery
To thirst the bitter juice of affliction,
No one had come there to apply an emollient consolation.
Their words like arrows draped my marrow
To drown me in the moat of slavery.
No one found my sorrow and weeping eyes
My dreams crumbled in my mirror of soul
In that anarchial isle of slavery,
The wheels of my life-cart mired entirely.
Hopes never came to the temple of thoughts
But there was a God in whom I had faith
And worshiped in the attic of my heart
One day he appeared for me:
''''''''''The God of Freedom '''''''''''''''
Then the eyes of the feudalist opened,
And he said a word that you are 'free',
Free from the domain of slavery
'''''''''The salvation from slavery'''''''''
Only a slave like me knows, the true meaning of ''Freedom''..

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Hans Vr 20 September 2011

Your word choice is great, Vipins and the message is touching, no shaking up the heart of the reader. I really feel this is a fantastic poem with a message that really everyone should read. Somehow after reader the poem, I thought, a bit beyond the physical slavery, about the many of us who willingly enslave ourselves to drugs, to television, moods and so many other modern ills. Let's keep freedom very high up in out shelve of ideals.

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Unwritten Soul 20 September 2011

I feel so good when i reached at the end...It really having a key inside the poem to unlock any to free from burden cage...I like the deep side you tried to let us see by using a'sutured, cranium, marrow and mimosa' that exist harmonically in this work and it really work! ! ..Vipin once again you prove us that your hand got something! ! ! keep more writing friend! :) :) _Unwritten Soul

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Jim Troy 21 September 2011

What a screaming powerful delightful song of the soul. I am comsumed by the force of feelings unlocked that had been imprisoned, wanting to shout.....and shout you have, and I could listen to that shouting all my life....... A soul unlocked and bursting and savoring freedom. Only certain souls can bring it like that...so deliciously rare. Thank you so much for it Jim Troy

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Allemagne Roßmann 21 September 2011

i was not in freedom until i attained it today.......what a nice write_amazingly spectacular?

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Christina Phan 22 September 2011

Im speechless and its was fanastic job on writting about freedom.

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Expiallidocious 20 December 2019

Your so good, but despite it all, you are so blessed with such talent! Your way ahead of most! Fabulous!

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Allemagne Roßmann 29 September 2012

one of the best writes to come across-well done

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Chanda Mwenechanya 01 November 2011

subtle insight and deep. What of beings slaves of freedom? Thanks for sharing keep on

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Harindhar Reddy 28 October 2011

By Jove! I appreciate the theme of the poem as slavery undid millions of live all across the globe. Now most of the souls are liberated yet now problems are terrorism and old problem of racism are soaring high. I marvel at these lines of the poem....... 'And one day He blessed me. The eyes of the feudalist mind opened, And ordered a word, a word, a word, that You have got ''Freedom''- '''''''''A salvation from slavery''''''''' Yes the poem started well with desperation and raised the tempo in the middle and ended in the at with solution and hope. A perfect masterpiece from The MAGICIAN OF WORDS Vipins... I will very soon you become one of top poets of 21 st century if keep writing like this... Perfect 10+++ is not enough to rate the poem. And a slave like me only knows, that, What is the meaning of ''Freedom''.. '

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Marlene Rashidi 23 October 2011

I loved it(: True meaning of Freedom

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