Annabel Cruz

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Concrete Spider - Poem by Annabel Cruz

Up, up
The smooth and glassy surface of my shower
He crawled
His delicate spindly legs glued, as if by magic
To the slippery wall
Navigating rivers and waterfalls most blissfully
Until a random
splash of water washed him down

Down

Down

Down

Down

Into a huddled mass
Of tangled legs
Twitching, twitching
On the shower floor


Comments about Concrete Spider by Annabel Cruz

  • Brian Jani Brian Jani (7/14/2014 4:29:00 AM)

    this is q nice and simple piece of writing.spiders in our homes, natural insect control. (Report) Reply

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  • Saadat Tahir Saadat Tahir (8/11/2012 12:33:00 AM)

    Nice lines... making a shower so extraordinary...
    People are so taken aback by a spider, anywhere near them...and you wrote a poem to do it justice.
    the twitching twitching... :)
    that’s what gives, us...ordinary mortals :) ……….the heebie jeebies

    liked yer lines
    cheers

    PS:
    here some fun on the score... :)
    Mallary Hope- Black Widow Spider (Jason Stephen's Winery) .....utube (Report) Reply

  • Adeline Foster Adeline Foster (8/4/2012 1:24:00 PM)

    I too love shape poetry. To off-set the lines perhaps one could use.~`. Just a thought, even without it this is good.
    Adeline (Report) Reply

  • Juan Olivarez (5/24/2012 5:27:00 PM)

    I like it, experianced the same thing a few years ago. (Report) Reply

  • Unwritten Soul Unwritten Soul (5/13/2012 9:48:00 AM)

    Nice one! ! i like it....maybe it a tribute to spiderman too hahahaha :) nice write! _Unwritten Soul (Report) Reply

  • Annabel Cruz (4/17/2012 9:56:00 PM)

    ok.....it's supposed to look like a spider (hence, the title) , but PH won't let me off-set the lines: -( (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, April 17, 2012



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