Tom J. Mariani (12/10/2007 8:01:00 AM)
You take the reader gently into the recognition of mortality. I like your use of the extended metaphor of his 70th birthday and the recognition at the end that there will not be '...many happy returns'
Tom |
Rocco Scocco (8/19/2007 12:07:00 AM)
nice moral, but last time i checked, this appears to be a story |
K K (3/6/2007 7:35:00 AM)
Mortality is very real but sometimes we forget. Nice reminder
KK |
Kee Thampi (3/6/2006 3:44:00 AM)
A shadow crossed his tired face
when from within a voice sang out,
it makes a feel to.............. |
Sid John Gardner (3/4/2006 2:42:00 AM)
Nice write Herbert reminds us all of our mortality.
Respect,
Sid John. |
Gina Onyemaechi (3/1/2006 2:41:00 AM)
I don't know Jim, Herbert, but I care about him and feel for him as much as his other friends. Saddening poem reminding us all of our inevitable final destination. Warm regards, Gina. |
Mister Insignificant (2/26/2006 9:59:00 PM)
i see you are still open for comment herbert which is good it shows your not afraid of the low mentality one givers, and you remain open to fair and just critique
from your associates a fine piece herbert worthy of a high mark
Warm regards allan |
Angie Maeots (2/26/2006 9:31:00 PM)
An excellent piece of moral delima and humanity Herbert.
Well done capturing the reader and reminding us of our mortality. |
