Valsa George


Twin Cinquains - Snake/Fish - Poem by Valsa George

SNAKE
Creepy, clammy
Uncoiling, twisting, slithering
Venom in fangs to snap
Reptile


FISH
Finny, scaly
Streamlined to fare
In waters deep n' dreary
Aquatic


Comments about Twin Cinquains - Snake/Fish by Valsa George

  • Veteran Poet - 1,229 Points Thomas A Robinson (8/7/2013 7:03:00 AM)

    I have come thrice now. The first I read did not comment and left. The second time I came back and commented but the dragon of verification devoured my comment and I was angry and left. The third time I came back determined and now I leave comment once again.
    The poems are not about snakes and fish but about the ability to express a complete thought in the confines
    of a very limited space. You captured that experience brilliantly, Valsa. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 347 Points David Wood (8/3/2013 5:43:00 AM)

    I like the contrast betwen the two. A great poem. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,735 Points Diane Hine (8/3/2013 3:42:00 AM)

    The sort of poem that's great to read aloud! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 628 Points Chandra Thiagarajan (8/2/2013 11:58:00 AM)

    Brilliant Cinquains on Snake and Fish . Enjoyed, Valsa! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,516 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (8/1/2013 10:14:00 PM)

    I see Dinesh Nairs's point. I think deep waters are CALM. Depth may feel dreary to us but for fish it's their natural environment. Beautifully rendered poem. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 347 Points Danny Draper (8/1/2013 10:07:00 PM)

    A good write I am not so skilled at this type of poem, great job. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,802 Points Heather Wilkins (8/1/2013 3:31:00 PM)

    both cinquains are well thought out and written enjoyed (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,726 Points Dinesh Nair (8/1/2013 10:59:00 AM)

    Your Cinquain on the snake is realistic. But you say about the fish living in the waters deep and dreary. It is not perhaps so.... I have read somewhere that fish lives a better life in spite of the threat to life from its bigger peers. They live an adventurous life that cannot be dreary like that of a snake. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 8,107 Points Geetha Jayakumar (8/1/2013 7:58:00 AM)

    Classy poem..Loved reading it...Good write.. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, August 1, 2013

Poem Edited: Thursday, August 1, 2013


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