Valsa George


Twin Cinquains - Snake/Fish


SNAKE
Creepy, clammy
Uncoiling, twisting, slithering
Venom in fangs to snap
Reptile


FISH
Finny, scaly
Streamlined to fare
In waters deep n' dreary
Aquatic

Submitted: Thursday, August 01, 2013
Edited: Thursday, August 01, 2013

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  • Veteran Poet - 1,229 Points Thomas A Robinson (8/7/2013 7:03:00 AM)

    I have come thrice now. The first I read did not comment and left. The second time I came back and commented but the dragon of verification devoured my comment and I was angry and left. The third time I came back determined and now I leave comment once again.
    The poems are not about snakes and fish but about the ability to express a complete thought in the confines
    of a very limited space. You captured that experience brilliantly, Valsa. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 339 Points David Wood (8/3/2013 5:43:00 AM)

    I like the contrast betwen the two. A great poem. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,405 Points Diane Hine (8/3/2013 3:42:00 AM)

    The sort of poem that's great to read aloud! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 534 Points Chandra Thiagarajan (8/2/2013 11:58:00 AM)

    Brilliant Cinquains on Snake and Fish . Enjoyed, Valsa! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,744 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (8/1/2013 10:14:00 PM)

    I see Dinesh Nairs's point. I think deep waters are CALM. Depth may feel dreary to us but for fish it's their natural environment. Beautifully rendered poem. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 347 Points Danny Draper (8/1/2013 10:07:00 PM)

    A good write I am not so skilled at this type of poem, great job. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,724 Points Heather Wilkins (8/1/2013 3:31:00 PM)

    both cinquains are well thought out and written enjoyed (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,560 Points Dinesh Nair (8/1/2013 10:59:00 AM)

    Your Cinquain on the snake is realistic. But you say about the fish living in the waters deep and dreary. It is not perhaps so.... I have read somewhere that fish lives a better life in spite of the threat to life from its bigger peers. They live an adventurous life that cannot be dreary like that of a snake. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 7,545 Points Geetha Jayakumar (8/1/2013 7:58:00 AM)

    Classy poem..Loved reading it...Good write.. (Report) Reply

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