Retribution Poem by Valsa George

Retribution

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When did she have a quarrel with life?
That left her mind with resentment rife
Her dreams are blurred by a diaphanous mist
And her life has taken an ugly twist

When she felt she was unwanted
She left the house unannounced
Now she wonders if it was an excuse lame
Knows quite well no one else but she is to blame

From her spirits, drained out all youthful thrill
Everything has come to a stand still
Now at life's barred gate, she knocks in vain
The ‘no entry' sign drowns her in pain

Far out, her mind wanders into deserts forlorn
She feels the bite of heat even in the morn
Sure this life for her has become a wild menace
But she will bear it as a penance without repugnance

Monday, October 20, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: life
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Deepak Kumar Pattanayak 20 October 2014

Incensed with bitter feelings of life she left little did she realize she had to repent latter on......Valsa......this is an instance not an exception to her alone......one of the aspects of life well addressed here in such a lovely poem......outstanding

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Kee Thampi 20 October 2014

When she felt she was unwanted She left the house unannounced Now she wonders if it was an excuse lame Knows quite well no one else but she is to blame never forget to quarrel....it make a blunter

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Bhargabi Dei Mahakul 20 October 2014

Excellent way of presentation. She repents and realizes in a marvellous way. Exceptional writing.

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Paul Sebastian 21 October 2014

Isn't there forgiveness and some kind of reconciliation? Why be punished, be blamed by the past? This poem evokes compassion for the sufferer. A beautiful poem and well written. Enjoyed it.

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Abekah Emmanuel 21 October 2014

From her spirits, drained out all youthful thrill Everything has come to a stand still Now at life's barred gate, she knocks in vain The ‘no entry' sign drowns her in pain Life is too short, sometimes, we make certain decisions which lead us to irreversible conditions in our lives. Each and everyday, we advance an inch to our graves and so let us make the best of today in order not to regret some day to come. Very emotional and poetically expressed.

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Kumarmani Mahakul 13 August 2018

After quarreling her mind got resentment and her dreams were blurred by a diaphanous mist. She felt she was unwanted and left the house. This event is so sad and the later depiction is much heart rendering. A beautiful poem nicely executed.

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Tajudeen Shah 03 November 2014

dear blessed poet, as ever, my mind is in pursuit of the her, who really faced such a struggle in life, and now owing to an impulsive move life turned ill fated, irreparable loss of the very self and so life in all... with a professional economy has such a great life situation is being treated in its deserving gravity. mastery moves many a mighty mind mountains, bravo. God bless.

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Md Asadullah 26 October 2014

This is what happens when actions are taken due to sudden impulse, Poor girly nothing much can be done for her, One can only pity her: (

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Tirupathi Chandrupatla 25 October 2014

Momentary feelings and immediate reactions have lasting results which may be unpleasant. No amount of repentance will bring back status quo. Beautifully presented in the poem. Thank you.

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Salini Nair 23 October 2014

Her dreams are blurred by a diaphanous mist And her life has taken an ugly twist..........................life has no reverse gear......very nice madam

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