Khairul Ahsan


Pristine Love


No love is as overwhelming and as pristine,
As the maiden love of a lass, say of sixteen.
When, like closed petals of a bud she begins to unfold
Herself, blossoming into a fragrant rose or marigold.

She seeks a hand to hold and wants hers as well be held,
In secluded privacy, from the outside world as if shelled.
She wants to love and be loved, to touch and be touched,
Promises never to leave the hand that she fondly clutched.

Standing on the crossroads of childhood and puberty,
She seeks a soul mate, not one who is always flirty.
She feels lonely at home, even in a crowd, or among peers,
Unless with her soul mate who keeps count of her fallen tears.

Promises everything that her soul mate wants her to be,
She herself also demands promises on matters flimsy.
Not realizing that promises are easy to make but difficult to keep,
Broken promises are hard to bear with, easy to make one weep.

Sometimes the lass' love remain held back and suppressed,
When she is wary that her emotions will not be addressed.
Flames of this unexpressed love burn her in slow motion
Whenever she muses over some missed conversation.

Lucky is he who wins the first love of a lass, in solemn trust
Pity on him who misses the offer, or throws it into the dust.
When a life's journey is begun hand in hand with no suspicion,
The two unsuspecting souls will no doubt reach their destination.

Submitted: Friday, July 26, 2013
Edited: Tuesday, March 11, 2014

Topic of this poem: love


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Dedicated to all the young lovers, in whose pristine minds love reigns supreme!

Dhaka
26 July 2013
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Comments about this poem (Pristine Love by Khairul Ahsan )

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (3/1/2015 10:10:00 AM)

    @Cassandra Jasmine
    Thanks for rereading my old poems and complimenting again so generously. Am much inspired.
    ''If more people don't know you, I have no idea whatsoever, just what you have been doing! Or for that matter, what the people around us have been doing.' - I too am clueless! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (2/28/2015 11:04:00 PM)

    @Michelle Claus
    My apologies for this belated acknowledgement of your nice comments you left on my poem after reading it. I am so glad that you could relate this poem to your own life.
    how love permeates over time and requires more labor and commitment than hopes and dreams. But it was important to be that girl 25 years ago and imagine a soul mate. - I appreciate your thoughts, and agree with you. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (2/26/2015 12:45:00 PM)

    @Amitava Sur,
    I am so glad that my poem has conveyed to you the essence of my poem - the purity of first love, which I have called 'pristine love' here. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (2/26/2015 12:29:00 PM)

    @Jeannette Heywood,
    Thank you very much for reading my poem and sharing your thoughts on it. The feelings of first love remain permanently etched in our hearts. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 54 Points Cassandra Jasmine (2/25/2015 9:04:00 PM)

    After all these months, I've reread 'Pristine Love'. For some unfathomable reason, I am finding myself loving it even more.
    I can't say why. I can't say what makes it so beautiful. I can't say what my favorite part of it this particular writing is, but I can say that it's magic. It's that morning sunrise above a pond, it's the dewdrops dusting the early morning, it's that one smile that comes from a special sunrise.
    We see sunrises everywhere.
    We see stupid little ponds and fake smiles everywhere.
    But at a given particular moment, if you're just lucky enough to witness it, that spark of something, just something... you'll know it. We'll know it. You will know if that certain something is there or just down the drain. It's... intangible, if I must say.
    All this is probably a blub of incoherence. I'm spewing everything at a mere whim.
    And Softly Silence Speaks? To A Young Poet? Priceless. Just priceless. I know I am speaking to an elder, but I can't hold myself. For this, I apologize in advance.
    If more people don't know you, I have no idea whatsoever, just what you have been doing! Or for that matter, what the people around us have been doing.
    I must be off before my father comes to reprimand me. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 467 Points Jeannette Heywood (11/10/2014 3:20:00 AM)

    Simply lovely. Expresses delicately the feelings of first love. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (7/7/2014 3:40:00 AM)

    @Kirti Sharma,
    Thanks for reading one of my oldest poems here and all your generous comments that you've left on my poem.
    I am deeply touched and inspired by your thoughtful comments and appreciation. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 762 Points Michelle Claus (7/6/2014 11:26:00 PM)

    I've been that girl that you described in your poem. At my current age,41, I have a hard time relating to the innocent and idealistic yearning of a 16-year-old - now knowing how love permeates over time and requires more labor and commitment than hopes and dreams. But it was important to be that girl 25 years ago and imagine a soul mate. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 7,479 Points Amitava Sur (6/30/2014 9:36:00 PM)

    Hi - Khairul I am so pleased to read the beautiful detailing about Fist love! ! ! The whole poem itself is so decently elaborated about the pure unbiased love..... I just loved it. Very nice. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 127 Points Kirti Sharma (6/27/2014 4:55:00 PM)

    wow! !
    thank God i didn't miss this one!
    just as i can relate! : D
    an awesome work! !
    i loved it... :)
    i even liked the rhymes! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (2/3/2014 12:17:00 AM)

    @Jessica Dehn,
    Thanks for reading my poem and the appreciation you've left here. Hope, you will have time to read some more and say a few more words. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (2/2/2014 11:45:00 PM)

    @Star Crossed Lady,
    Thanks a lot for your kind words on me and my poem. I am highly inspired and elated by your kind words.
    My poem was written for women of your age. I am glad that it met your liking. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (2/2/2014 10:14:00 PM)

    @Crystal Conrick-knight,
    Thanks for reading my poem and the thoughts you shared. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 188 Points Jessica Dehn (1/29/2014 4:09:00 PM)

    Beautifully written! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (1/24/2014 9:30:00 PM)

    @ Sherlyn Davis,
    Thanks for reading my poem and leaving your generous comment here. I am inspired. Shall appreciate if you can make some time to read, rate and comment on a few more. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (1/24/2014 9:08:00 PM)

    @ Michelle Hanes,
    Thanks for reading my poem and leaving your inspiring words! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (1/24/2014 7:15:00 PM)

    @ Victoria Meza,
    Thank you very much for reading my poem and leaving your comment here. Thanks for your generous ten! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (1/23/2014 2:46:00 AM)

    @ Angel Of The Night,
    Thanks a lot for your kind words. I am truly inspired! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (1/22/2014 10:44:00 AM)

    @ Erika Wingo,
    Thanks for appreciating my poem. I am inspired. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,927 Points Khairul Ahsan (1/22/2014 6:31:00 AM)

    @ Bri Edwards,
    1. The word 'pervasive' has been changed.
    2. At sixteen, girls may be well past 'onset of puberty', but here, the girl I am looking at, seems still to be standing at cross roads of childhood and puberty, meaning, she still has some childhood left in her, as she is entering a bigger and fanciful world of puberty at sixteen.
    3. The word 'pretension' has been changed by 'suspicion'. The meaning should be clear now.
    4. My views are different, from what you have mentioned in your p.s. Two categories would be alright, but not depending on English being used as primary or secondary language. The division could be based on whether English was used with appropriate grammar and punctuation, or without.
    Thanks for the elaborate critique. It has made my poem finer, I guess. (Report) Reply

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