Opinions
It's all been said, hasn't it?
Then why am I compelled?
Grabbed pen and then, with a click
Wrote verse my heart's withheld
I think the moon was laughing
As she heard my lame refrains
She hid her face for a while
Clouds covering her disdain
She said my verse were lousy
That poems don't need to rhyme
My imagery was childlike
She thinks I should resign
It broke my heart to hear her
Reject my best attempts
Slammed down my pen and notebook
Upset by her comments
I Said:
Oh moon, you are quite lovely
The queen of Earth's dark nights
The stars all bow before you
An army dressed in white
But soon you'll lose your glory
A new light will have won
Next time I want opinions
I think I'll ask the Sun
the moon has a partial prosaic view being rather plain in its own image. the sun on the other hand is mysterious in its grandeur and casting a comprehensive view upon the universe. nicely written
ask the sun, The sun knows everything. good write. I invite you to read my poems and comment.
Well expressed thoughts and feelings. A poignant work of art.......................
well, i looked at it again. it is STILL a truly beautiful AND clever poem. :) bri
You are right of course Bri! I've corrected the error! Thanks so much. :)
I enjoyed this very refreshing write on the moon and the sun. I do believe that the moon has some kind of influence on the mind, so has the sun. You can't look at any of them for a long period of time. Both are equally important to our existence on earth. You wrote this very well. Regards.
i wont agree if the moon forms that opinion, as now i have read your poetry myself...certainly, if given a chance to say something, the moon wont dare to challenge the platform of her praises! ! !
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Quarrel between two beauties! However, your poems are pretty alright. Don't need to ask either the sun or the moon.