Modified Lounge Poem by gabriella mendoza

Modified Lounge



I don't know what pushes our world in circles.
What causes the sun to turn old.
I don't care to know how the stars are standing,
How the moon wept
While the wind blows over empty fields
Along with your ghost.

I don't care, how
To them you are alive
yet
[To me you're dead]
dead.

Not one bit, do I care
how
I lost you, while I dreamt.
We were lying in your car fast asleep.
[waiting to cue the downfall]
We dreamt…fast asleep…((until)) …
The fatal blow took you
Away.

It's just a disaster I can't seem to [forget] recall.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Brenda Arroyo 11 March 2010

Ahhh.... This is stunning. Terribly sad... But it is in its honesty and the revealing of your silver secrets... That it mended so sweet... So terribly, hurtfuly, sweet. I loved it. Because even me, just reading it, felt the loss.

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Emancipation Planz 11 March 2009

I don't know what pushes our world in circles.... This forceful opening line caused me to press against its circumference and travelate slouched on a couch.. recapturing many phrases over... Thank you! !

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