I can’t breathe
Unless you soothe me
With your angelic smiles
And Take me to the heavenly doors
Of enchanting cosmic canopy
Each shines fixed to base in audacity
Perplexes, muses, challenges luminosity
When I tried to dig, saw veracity
Wonderful Fusion of Godly creation
And tremendous joy for invention
But life is an empty sky
Moonless, starless demonic dark sky,
Deadly Desert without oasis
And no mirage to tease me to reach
Your presence is a lovely breeze
It’s gravity I can’t define
God give me all earthly grief
I stand and suffer silently
But never isolate me from
This gentle, naughty, silvern spirit!
I like the use of language in the first section. Big bold and complex then the poem changes and the language gets more simple but still effective.
Extensive use of vocabulary to describe how love can change our perception to life. The first half shows the positive side of love and the second is filled with despair. When in love and things are going well, we tend to see life as good (beautiful) and when not, we see life as not being good. Yet I've discovered that, 'Life is neither good nor bad, life is life'... we decide accordingly. Very well written. Enjoyed it much.
Nice poem composed with vivid imagery. I liked the theme very much. Kudos to your skill. Keep it up. I rated it 10. Thanks for sharing.....
“Great, volition of thought riding in the spirit of harmony”.... I like it...thank you my sister and God bless...10+++
your presence is a lovely breeze it's gravity I can't define I love this quote. beautiful
I can’t breathe Unless you soothe me With your angelic smiles is the beauty and joyous reward of loving greatly and deeply. God give me all earthly grief I stand and suffer silently But never isolate me from This gentle, naughty, silvern spirit! is a prayer of true love prepared to suffer greatly, yet endue silently, if only the lover is never parted from the 'gentle, naughty' beloved prized above all else. A beautiful poem read with a smile in the heart and in the eyes.
Never isolate me from this gentle, naughty, silvern spirit_____Awesome! ! ! ! ! Well written verses Rekha! !
when expect more we getting self disapoint too. This what ur poem says. In one side we demands to be loved by our offsprings with sooth, care, smile etc and in other side we admitting ourselves that life is not a fresh flower like instead it is dry. A dryness will not yeild anything support to liveliness. I cannot understand why these two matter collaborated here. May be you livve alone or lonliness covers you.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
keep the spirit high, good poem