Martin O'Neill

Rookie - 12 Points (20-06-1958 / Solihull, Birmingham, England)

5.58pm - Poem by Martin O'Neill

Alison is going to be late
For her train connection
Because Peter changed lane
Instead of radio channel.
They're both shaken
But will recount the tale
Over dinner with friends, tonight.
Josh's Daddy just died,
The police have announced
And the clear up will take
Several hours.
Meanwhile, diversions are in place.
His dinner will go cold.
More traffic news
At seven.


Comments about 5.58pm by Martin O'Neill

  • Rookie - 63 Points John Raubenheimer (10/24/2013 8:30:00 AM)

    Lives, Many you can imagine beyond the four names... clearing away the debris to a laconic newsreader's voice-over. Lovely poem. (Report) Reply

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  • Silver Star - 4,231 Points Valerie Dohren (8/12/2012 7:47:00 AM)

    Such a powerful write, so much said in so few words. Brilliant Martin. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 750 Points Ruth Walters (6/19/2012 12:40:00 PM)

    all life and death in a few lines of poetry jus like a news bulletin and really quite poignant... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Shadow Girl (4/9/2012 9:10:00 PM)

    Very clever and well written a snippet from a moment in time juxtaposed yet connected...fantastic write.
    -SG (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 445 Points Danny Draper (3/25/2012 7:09:00 AM)

    One twitch in concentration while driving a car and the time line can and will be irreparably altered. One second, one life time. A good write. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Casual Diamond (2/22/2012 10:41:00 AM)

    i thought it was going to be about cocktail time but rather much more disheartening. its made me feel quite sad. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 487 Points Patti Masterman (1/22/2012 5:19:00 PM)

    A great summation of the way the modern era makes us seem as insubstantial (and as long lasting) as ghosts. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 2 Points Paul Hansford (1/15/2009 5:11:00 AM)

    Very chilling indeed. Succinct and skilful. Brilliant ending. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, January 12, 2009



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