Zinnia Narcissa

Your Love Is Like The Planets In The Universe - Poem by Zinnia Narcissa

I want to be close to you like Mercury to see your full glow
and brightness of your intimacy

I see you like a Venus because of your unsurpassed beauty
and your unfathomable; the abysmal kind of love

You revolve like the Earth that gives a magnetic kind of force
to touch the core and mantle of our hearts

I see your ardent desires like a red Mars to fight as war to cover
and protect me

You give a gigantic precious tenderness and enormously
unselfish affections like a Jupiter

You give me snowball rings like Saturn that gives remembrance all beautiful
things that we had been in the atmosphere of treasure memories

Your warmhearted axis that tilts on the rocky core of my life
is like in a deep ocean of Uranus that clasps me with grasping arms

You are like the sea as Uranus that your gentle flows
like clouds that drift my soul

On a very far and infinite distance from your presence,
you are like a Pluto moon that travels with me
and you are always there for me orbiting within
Your Wonderful and Marvelous Love.

Comments about Your Love Is Like The Planets In The Universe by Zinnia Narcissa

  • Gold Star - 27,684 Points Chinedu Dike (5/27/2015 10:55:00 PM)

    Beautifully and elegantly written love poem. The use of planetary bodies to adopt metaphoric piece of lines is indeed poetically remarkable. A lovely poem insightfully penned with conviction. Thanks for sharing. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON. ➕10 (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 314 Points Benjamin Age (5/17/2015 3:00:00 PM)

    I see you like a Venus because of your unsurpassed beauty, , my best line in the poem, & i lov all ur poems Rose Gardner (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,791 Points Dave Walker (5/14/2015 1:35:00 PM)

    A beautifully put poem, a great play on words. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,173 Points Hazel Durham (5/11/2015 8:07:00 AM)

    Very entertaining and original love poem and so beautifully expressed, a gem! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 997 Points Naida Nepascua Supnet (5/11/2015 12:15:00 AM)

    No one has ever thought of the way you described and compared love
    very different.
    Mabuhay (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 30 Points Henry Garcia (5/8/2015 11:26:00 PM)

    Highly creative thoughts. Very interesting to read (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 15,373 Points Kim Barney (3/29/2015 12:55:00 PM)

    Interesting concept, comparing love to planets. I never would have thought of that. Enjoyed reading it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 73 Points Maria Luzong (8/22/2014 11:06:00 AM)

    Gigantic precious poem
    Marvelous poem (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 10 Points Cosheila Bihag (7/27/2014 1:24:00 AM)

    wow....i enjoyed reading this poem... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 6 Points Dawn Fuzan (5/15/2014 9:47:00 AM)

    Herbert I like your uneque style.keep it up man! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 70 Points Helena Zen (5/6/2014 10:51:00 AM)

    ....Extremely and highly romantic
    ....universally beutiful
    ... a masterpiece work (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Jonas Goncalves (5/5/2014 3:47:00 PM)

    This mix of detailed descriptions of what is felt and metaphors involving the planets is amazing! I'm in love with the way you expose the loving feeling. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Vilma Gomez (5/4/2014 4:35:00 AM)

    What a galactic kind of love to the beloved. BRAVO and BRILLIANT (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 14,311 Points * Sunprincess * (5/3/2014 12:42:00 PM)

    .....truly enjoyed this one...could this be a dedication to someone special....a beautiful poem (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 201 Points Bernadette Fernandez (4/29/2014 1:08:00 PM)

    Wonderful and Fantastic. Very enthralling and riveting. Highly beautiful (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 15,505 Points John Westlake (4/27/2014 8:46:00 PM)

    A lovely poem although you did miss out Neptune. Maybe this was intentional? ? (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 9 Points Jessica Hernandez-damian (4/25/2014 8:31:00 PM)

    Beautiful poem. I really enjoy reading how you compare love with the universe. so indeed love is universe. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,479 Points Mihaela Pirjol (4/25/2014 12:59:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem, and a great way to compare Love with The Universe! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 109 Points Monica Rupazo (12/9/2013 9:01:00 AM)

    Lovely desire exposed from within to expound about the sweetest scent of purity. Lovely poem I salute..... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 52 Points Erika Wingo (11/30/2013 4:57:00 AM)

    An excellent poem about love. I really enjoyed the comparison of love and the universe. Love, after all, is universal... (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, September 11, 2013

Poem Edited: Sunday, November 9, 2014

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