Your Eyes Speak Poem by Free Faller
Your Eyes Speak
When I look into your eyes
I see a rushing river
Your tears are a waterfall
So cold that when I look I shiver
When I look into your eyes
I see a fighting soldier
Who fights and wins a war
Never worrying about the enemy that is upon your shoulder
When I look into your eyes
I see something no one can defeat
Your eyes are your words
Your eyes are how you speak
The eyes are certainly the windows on our soul Free Faller, you express a strong view from the eyes of the soul you speak of. Could your love bethe reason why? Your poem has a rivers flow. 10 from Tai,
It's a very powerful piece now if I was to change anything it would be the last line of the second verse. Your second verse now reads When I look into your eyes I see a fighing soldier who fights and wins a war A person who could go through the strongest boulder. Now that's good, but if you want to you could write....When I look into your eyes I see a fighing soldier who fights and wins a war Never worrying about the enemy that is upon your shoulder. But it's your poem and if you want to leave the way it is that's okay also it is still powerful. Great Job.
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Very deep and insightful. I look at emotion in a new way.10 out of 10. -Lydia