The night falls,
As though slain by the sun,
Entwined are we,
The salvation for which,
You sacrifice yourself,
Appears once,
Bringing with it,
A tide of hope,
Then it withers and dies,
Smothered by the abyss,
Your darkened heart,
Beats no more,
For eternity still,
How could you do this?
Tear us asunder?
Both demons and souls lost,
Surround us,
Wailing their pain and fear,
Thick, red tears, fall from their eyes,
The shine that once shined,
Is forever gone,
Now they are soulless,
Their wretched crying ends,
Bringing forth a silence,
Thats how I know,
Through the fog of silence,
An entity approaches,
Not one of good and light,
But one of darkness and sin,
This is what has come of us,
Forever trapped in this place,
This realm of darkness,
Then it is apparent,
That through no fault of my own,
But because of you,
We,
Have Fallen
The night falls, As though slain by the sun, I say in complete honesty (as is my wont) this is one of the most captivating, imaginative beginning to a poem i have ever read in the entirety of my life. I mean such imagery... you truly paint wonderful and at times aphotic pictures in your poetry. I think the darkness in your poetry, mixed with an element of nature and pure emotion really makes for greatness. From beginning to end, metaphor and just sheer mental paintings engross the reader and leaves him with something to think about when he is done. This poem in itself has inspired me to keep on writing. Job superbly done! ! !
The night falls, As though slain by the sun, this imagery seems to beg more, such poetic insight...
this.... this is.... unspeakable, undeniable, unpredictable, utterly and truly, amazing. this is totally bomb. (excuse my slang! lolz) i wish i could write like this. itz totally amazing. i can see your pain. feel ur tortured soul in the wordz u write. ur totally amazing, dont ever let anyone tell you different! Love, Heart of Ice
Well done! i feel like i am surrounded by haunted forest...but with the bright core! like it... This is dark but i love the feeling u grow in me
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I think this is another really passionate poem. Although I really wish I knew what these people did though. It's very good. Most of your poems seem to center love so I recommend reading this fantastic poem by Alfred Edward Houston - Along the field we came by- and - She walks in beauty - by Lord Byron. You'll like them a lot.