Musfiq us shaleheen

Rookie - 851 Points (31st, December,1970 / Khulna, Bangladesh)

The Origin of Life and Earth


The clouds move gently
And join them together
Then makes them into stack
The rain comes out of it
Man is created by
the extract of clay
Firmly fixed as a drop
In a place of settlement
Then drop into a leech
suspended things and blood clot
It becomes a chewed like substance
the creation by our Lord!
He turned to the havens
When it was smoke
Havens and the earth
were connected entity
And separated after -


-Shaleheen,17th April,2013

Submitted: Tuesday, April 16, 2013
Edited: Thursday, October 03, 2013

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the origin of life and earth which is defined by our Lord

Comments about this poem (The Origin of Life and Earth by Musfiq us shaleheen )

  • Silver Star - 4,083 Points Hazel Durham (4/24/2013 7:37:00 AM)

    A great description of how the world was created, you have a great imagination delivered with panache! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 4 Points Nader Baheri (4/23/2013 5:49:00 AM)

    i like this poem musfiq.especially the ending where our lord created just heaven and earth, where the creation of the hell is missing.i beleive it s so clever of you that you havent mention the hell.~nb (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Madina Morris (4/20/2013 3:36:00 PM)

    I do like this poem. Can't wait to read many many more. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 93 Points Payal Parande (4/20/2013 6:02:00 AM)

    well i think it is a brilliant thinking, the own imagination of how the world must have been created......just brilliant
    and beautiful (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,041 Points Gulsher John (4/19/2013 7:49:00 PM)

    Not bad but such themes require grandeur trratment......
    You u have to bring that diction and syntax and even tone that appropriate to such themes
    ........... divinity ought to be veiled in sublimity.....
    Keep doing good job (Report) Reply

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