Senryu 27 Series (Victory) Poem by Savita Tyagi

Senryu 27 Series (Victory)

Rating: 5.0


A desire to win
Demands a constant search for
An adversary.

If none is in front
You can find plenty to fight
Within your own self.

I would rather face
My vices as enemy
Than the world outside.

‘Cause beating myself
Is in my hands but not a
Beating of this world.

My inner world
Victory offers an outer
Vision to master.

8.18.2018

Revised on 8.21.2018

Saturday, August 18, 2018
Topic(s) of this poem: reflection,victory
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Note: inspiration to write the first Senryu came from watching a prominent personality constantly picking a fight to win but later the poem took its own shape with additional Senryu added. Kelly's comment inspired me to finish the thought that was in mind.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kelly Kurt 18 August 2018

The adversary can be yourself. A profound Senryu.

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Khairul Ahsan 20 August 2018

Excellent observation, Kelly!

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Khairul Ahsan 20 August 2018

So much said and so much left to be perceived by self introspection, in so few words! 10/10.

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Muzahidul Reza 02 September 2018

A series of well penned Senryu on victory you have fantastically shared here, who does not desire for victory? but for it need deeds, thanks for sharing,10

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Kumarmani Mahakul 31 August 2018

I would rather face My vices as enemy Than the world outside. ‘Cause beating myself Is in my hands but not a Beating of this world.......so touching and true. A great philosophical poem nicely executed.10

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Edmund Strolis 31 August 2018

This sentiment especially in this time of constant incivility is so very true. We can shock those around us by failing to react. A humble nature these days speak loudly. To pull the world down in order to lift ourselves up is an illusion. We all go down as a result. I appreciate this writing for the message conveyed. Wonderful.....

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Bri Edwards 23 August 2018

thanks for poem and Poet's Notes! i especially enjoyed the first 3; 1 & 2 i liked best. to MyPoemList. Unlike Savita's vices, MY vices are SO BAD that i'd take my chances against the world instead! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ‘Cause Winning myself..i'd substitute ..Beating myself......[NOT beating myself up! ]...for...Winning myself. [syllable count stays the same] i'm not sure of the meaning of last senyru. oops! Senryu! bri :)

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Savita Tyagi 30 August 2018

Thanks Bri for your comment and suggestion. I didn’t like the word winning myself too much. Though meaning is same it had a little too much weight but couldn’t think of anything else at that time. Now I have edited it with your suggestion.

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Valsa George 21 August 2018

A profound truth! Only when there is an adversary, our bench marks will go up or else we will stay in a self complacent mood! Wisely put!

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Savita Tyagi 30 August 2018

Thank you Walsa for giving an uplift to competitive spirit of the poem with your comment.

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