Treasure Island

Sandra Martyres

(5th October / Mumbai - India)

Rain (Senryus)


1. The Rain Gods relent
Opening the heavens flood gates
To water the earth

2. Children love the rain
Just splashing in the puddles
Their favourite game

3. Barefoot in the rain
But beggars do not complain
No rain means more pain

Submitted: Thursday, June 25, 2009
Edited: Thursday, June 23, 2011

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  • Dr.subhendu Kar (7/9/2009 4:13:00 PM)

    . Barefoot in the rain
    But beggars do not complain
    No rain means more pain................eloquent write by imagery,10++++++.......................thanks fo apprec8iation (Report) Reply

  • Sameer Ahmed (7/6/2009 3:10:00 AM)

    The eventful Senryus written with so much pure images
    that are so close to the real life observation. Rain is always
    a joy that soaks through everyone's heart. Rain is indeed
    a healing beauty whether it be physical or emotional.... (Report) Reply

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (6/29/2009 10:33:00 AM)

    The Rain Gods relent
    Opening the heavens flood gates
    To water the earth... tainGod is welcome onearth.. good write...

    read mine'Rian delay' andinflamed mind
    ... (Report) Reply

  • Christine Kerr (6/27/2009 10:46:00 AM)

    The elders hate the rain
    Their arthritis starts to flame
    Bending over can be the worst
    when the flood bubble begins to burst

    It is a great poem in figuring out what all the walks of life think about the rain. Farmers, Dogs, Plants....10++ (Report) Reply

  • Carl Harris (6/26/2009 1:49:00 PM)

    In the second line of the 'Rain' senryu, opening is two syllables, not three. I even checked my theasaurus to make sure. Otherwise, all the other lines are okay and they are all very good senryu poems, Sandra. All you have to do is rephrase it like this, 'Opening the heaven's floodgates' and it will be perfect. Carl. (Report) Reply

  • Ejaz Khan (6/26/2009 3:51:00 AM)

    Sun, water and air, the most important elements for soil to play with. God knows that and sends the rain. A beautiful imagery! (Report) Reply

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