Sandra Martyres

Rookie - 1 Points (5th October / Mumbai - India)

Down Memory Lane - In A Local Train - Poem by Sandra Martyres

It was a trip down memory lane
My journey on a Mumbai local train
Boarding the Ladies Compartment
I managed to land a window seat
Which in my younger days
Was considered the veteran’s treat
As only the fleet-footed and the agile
Were able to leap into the moving train
For these coveted seats to stake their claim

I watched as the passengers boarded
Most with household provisions loaded
But each with her own seat preference
Some chose to sit in the direction
Of the moving train
While others opted to be with friends
The short distance travelers
For convenience, just stood near the door

If you are a regular train commuter
You will probably wonder
What’s so special about this mundane routine
But believe me it is not as boring as it may seem
A journey on a local train can be quite an experience
The chatty ladies provide entertainment and education
All you need to do is to keep your eyes and ears open
To treat yourself to fun and free advice on any and everything

You can hear hot tips on the stock market
Get free lessons on bringing up children
Easy recipes for their teatime snacks
Quick home remedies for coughs and colds
On the lighter side there is the latest gossip on the stars
And opinions galore on the current TV soap operas
If you are lucky you may even get a slice of cake
In case a passenger decides her birthday to celebrate

I savored every moment of the trip
Listening attentively to all the ladies around me
Not being a regular I did not have my own clique
So I was free to choose and spent time listening
To the many animated discussions
Ranging from politics to children’s obsessions
All in all by the time I reached my destination
I had the sensation that I was wiser far than when I started out


Comments about Down Memory Lane - In A Local Train by Sandra Martyres

  • Gold Star - 43,053 Points Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (6/4/2015 9:52:00 PM)

    A splendid slice of verse, young missy..No surprise to me, tho'...I've come to expect it from your jacket of literary jewels! ~FjR~ (Report) Reply

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  • Veteran Poet - 1,937 Points Elena Sandu (6/4/2015 3:47:00 PM)

    What a pleasure to find your poem on the first page dear Sandra!
    Lovely writing, your magic pen carried me back reminding me of own childhood times, yes, for me it was the same.
    Always a joy to read your poems, glad to find you! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 31,799 Points Chinedu Dike (6/4/2015 12:36:00 PM)

    Beautiful narrative poem, insightfully penned with conviction. I really enjoyed the way the story unfolded. A lovely poem indeed. Thanks for sharing. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 13,735 Points Rajnish Manga (6/4/2015 7:44:00 AM)

    Great enjoyment, great training, great observation during the local train journey in Mumbai contribute to make a great poem, par excellence. Hats off to you, Sandra. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 17,485 Points Kim Barney (6/4/2015 7:35:00 AM)

    Captivating poem. I found myself riding along with you and eavesdropping on all those conversations around me. Thank you. Well done! (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,795 Points Ayman Parray (6/4/2015 7:08:00 AM)

    I have been on a similar train ride long ago, back then I was a kid. But your poem reminds me of those days and you describe it so beautifully. Thank you, Sandra (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 431 Points Patti Masterman (10/21/2009 5:55:00 PM)

    Sounds like a great way to spend part of a day. I relish that feeling; of being surrounded by delicious talk; and being owned by nobody, can freely eavesdrop
    or participate in either of the discussions that appeals to me; or simply remain
    the mysterious stranger who only listens..(smile) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Anand Madhukar (9/17/2009 11:28:00 AM)

    Your minute powers of observation are very much in evidence in this write. Excellent narration as well. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 3 Points Sulaiman Mohd Yusof (8/24/2009 8:28:00 AM)

    I love taking the public transport, in such a way, you can be inspired through out by the variation of characteristic and behavior of a large commuters on board. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sarwar Chowdhury (8/22/2009 3:10:00 PM)

    powerful compact composition! The train can be a amazing metaphor!
    10+ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 5 Points Subroto Chatterjee (8/18/2009 11:42:00 PM)

    Quite true what you say....The Mumbai local, among other things, can teach one (if required) to be PATIENT.....
    Cheers.
    Subroto (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sonya Florentino (8/18/2009 7:54:00 AM)

    one a train ride, one has many choices... you can sleep, read a good book, listen to music, use your laptop, watch the wonderful scenery or listen and observe the people around you, write a poem... indeed how can one be bored? (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Bhaswat Chakraborty (8/18/2009 6:30:00 AM)

    This poem reminds me the local train journeys in the Kolkata area in my younger days. It can indeed be very enjoyable. Very well written. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 168 Points Sathyanarayana M V S (8/14/2009 3:00:00 AM)

    Great persons listen more observe more. This is a very very good poem........touching the realities of life..........a piece of life in train.........all that commotion, those runs and sweats........Wonderful experience......reading this poem. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 12 Points premji premji (8/13/2009 4:46:00 AM)

    dear sandra,
    even i too travel in local trains...
    from those people, i pick up lots of jokes and write it down on my diary... some i can use them for writing stories and poems...these people are so innocent... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sandra Fowler (8/12/2009 10:00:00 PM)

    Very warm and colorful. You travel in good company,
    Sandra. And I have been with you all the way. Lovely...

    As always,

    Sandra (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Jasmin Whyte (8/12/2009 1:34:00 PM)

    Sandra, you shuttled me along with you on this ride! What a treat, and i found myself 'listening' to the chatter...............love these lines

    'You can hear hot tips on the stock market
    Get free lessons on bringing up children
    Easy recipes for their teatime snacks
    Quick home remedies for coughs and colds.........' (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ted M (8/12/2009 8:02:00 AM)

    My God! Sandra this is a treat. From the minis to such a complete story. It's like wholesome nutritious food for a reader’s mind. It's great to read an artistic poem that long, unlike those Haikus or senryus. This is quite an interesting story like the kind you find in Amol Palekar movies, simple, nice, and beautiful. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 8 Points Anjali Sinha (8/12/2009 6:50:00 AM)

    wow
    what an experience
    great! ! ! ! ! !

    what about getting to share a poem or two
    does that happen on your train journey too

    but not so here
    for us its so dull
    no entertainment

    lovely poem
    i enjoyed it
    a tenner for your narration
    and style
    anjali (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Alison Cassidy (8/11/2009 9:50:00 PM)

    It is your poet's eye and ear that 'makes' this poem! You watch and listen and allow the rich tapestry of life to well and truly fill your consciousness. Then you share it with detail and skill so that we can all enjoy your train journey. I guess it's a lesson on living - on noticing and cherishing the mundane as well as the sublime. Great piece. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, August 10, 2009

Poem Edited: Wednesday, May 25, 2011


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