Fire is extinguished but the ashes are hot,
Nature writes a story with the same old plot,
How naughty is she with a coin for the slot,
Moves the machine for a new lovely game,
The pointer rotates and stops at your name,
Comes back to you like a pet that is tame,
The eyes are filled with the light of past,
Heart beats are louder once again at last,
And the soul is up with a big bang blast,
Emotions spread, universe is created,
The dormant love by a shake is treated,
Weather is changed cold winds are heated,
The universe so created is confined in a heart,
And the heart is hot for the poetry and art,
Romantic poem outcomes after thwart!
You were a need you are still a need,
For you and your love is the childish greed,
The embryo of love is dormant in the seed,
In the courtship embryo came out as romance,
In the union of life as the pleasure of dance,
When flowers sprung what a beauty at a glance!
You have been always a source of joy,
I never took you just merely a toy,
You are still my girl, me the old playboy,
Play is different but its spirit is the same,
See beauty in this lovely nice rimed game,
If I have any fame it's just your name,
You are still the essence of all my deeds,
You only you, you are need of the needs,
Thoughts and dreams are merely your seeds!
Beautiful poem, with many interesting lines... You are still the essence of all my deeds, You only you, you are need of the needs, Thoughts and dreams are merely your seeds! Very true said in few lines.......A woman is always an inspiration for creation...Loved reading it.
it seems something wrong with the digital pulses.. forgive if a review posted is repeated, and kindly delete all save one.
A few years ago, chanced to read a review of Pablo Neruda's poems, of which, the indian critic praised him for his mastery in using a woman in the place of nature. After the first reading of your poem, i wanted to dig a lil bit, and now, i find this creation suits, rather stands still better and enticing a praise to the absolute nature. I had to read all the reviews below as a resource to get justified. To me, i don't find any woman of your life whom you cared most, valued most, and still finds delights in being with her, and praising her for what she has been to you as a mortal. May be because of the terms like 'playboy', game, and stuff like that. in anyways, i take the 'fitrath' in place, and still keep enjoying with that blessed, enduring youthfulness of 'her' in any ones life. Such an ocean of similies and metaphors, almost adhering syllables adds beauty still. God bless.
I hope this is life poem with the tinge of death...nice one thank you
Wow, what a wonderful poem. I have been searching for something to read among your great poems and the title of this write captivated my eyes. Excellent write, Sir Akhtar. Every line you have woven is beautiful and Superbly worded. " If I have any fame it is just your name." Wonderful line from a great poem. Onto my Poem List. And I concur with the marvelous comments of the brilliant Poet, Aniruddha.
Like a fresh breeze as I said earlier, a lovely poem that is not easy to find
Sir, I like the poem and the symbols in it. Its a very nice poem. thanks for sharing.
Outstanding write about the love of a good woman with inspired lines!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
A Woman being the builder of the vast universe..........a rare thought in today's society.......THANKS.