I Love You (Villanelle) Poem by Gert Strydom

I Love You (Villanelle)



(after Elizabeth Barrett Browning)

I love you with feelings that are true and right,
as our relationship has come with Godly grace,
I do love you through every day and night,

even when times of joy are far from sight
as you make this earth a heavenly place.
I love you with feelings that are true and right,

while I long to be to you the companion that I might
as the depth of our feelings are sometimes without a trace,
I do love you through every day and night,

while you draw me nearer to the Godly light
and onward daily our lives do constantly race.
I love you with feelings that are true and right,

with gentleness, without any fear and fright
although my childish ways might be commonplace
I do love you through every day and night.

Even if for you I have got struggle and fight
have got to face the most dangerous menace;
I love you with feelings that are true and right,
I do love you through every day and night.

[Reference: 'XLIII' 'How do I love thee? Let me count the ways']

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Technical Critic 27 February 2022

You did a fairly good job, except that MENACE does not rhyme with any of the other words that end with ACE. The stress is on the wrong syllable, and the unstressed A does not have the 'long' A sound like the others.

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Kim Barney 10 March 2017

I've never tried to write a villanelle before, but you seem to have done a very good job with this one, and may just have inspired me to try it. Thanks!

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