I Kept On Walking Poem by Freespirit Juneja

I Kept On Walking

Rating: 4.6


I Kept On Walking

Fixed my eyes on the world
Strived to be a free bird
Kept aside all the herds
To be a man,
who does the talking
I kept on walking

My aims were like a beautiful sky
Its zenith required more than a try
Ordeal ahead was free from lies
Had to finish before the soul dies
My honest deeds did the talking
Without a hush, I kept on walking

Leaping all the tumbling stones
Beaming despite breaking my bones
I 'd to cover the journey alone
To be a Man
who does the talking
I kept on walking

Suddenly, my journey got tied
Besides me danced my bride
All my aims got flayed
New foundation need to be laid
Problems kept on flocking
And still, I kept on walking

My life became totally shallow
Dragged into deathly hallows
Then God brightened the day
When my baby had the say
Negating being its ultimate prey
I started the journey afresh
Kept all my aims suppressed

And I just kept on walking
Till the heavens came knocking

Saturday, March 10, 2012
Topic(s) of this poem: life
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
It's about the life of a common man....
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Valerie Dohren 15 April 2012

The poem is essentially very good - there are two words I would change, however, these being `gawking` and `nerds.` Perhaps instead of `gawking` you could replace this with `fixing`, and `nerds` maybe could be replaed with `herds` if you want to maintain the rhyme.

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Dave Walker 14 April 2012

A great poem, like it.

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isabella Francis 08 April 2012

Classic piece of poetry. Loved it. :)

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Fico Espiritu 11 April 2012

A very nice poem. The thought flows softly like an unimpeded free flowing stream.

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Benjamin Jansen 11 April 2012

solid piece of writing man. true as can be. from the heart.

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Samra Haq 09 May 2018

Very Nice poem. Even though your poem is very sad. But I really like your way of writing.

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Swetha Vanakayalapati 29 June 2012

My aims were like a beautiful sky Its zenith required more than a try Ordeal ahead was free from lies Had to finish before this soul dies My honest deeds were doing the talking Without a hush, i kept on walking My life became totally shallow Dragging into deathly hallows Then the god brightened the day When my baby had the say Negating being its ultimate prey I started the journey afresh Keeping all my aims suppressed I kept on walking Till the heavens came knocking the truths set the tone of the poem which have been furnished with ease and the grief behind the dream and aim have worked out so perfect........right from your heart! !

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Erika Michelle 10 June 2012

up in the third paragraph i reccomend you switch the wording to: beaming despite my breaking bones. just a little suggestion (: i enjoyed the journey theme, it's a good message, never let your head down.

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Aman Sa 13 May 2012

striking and powerful and a rhythmic song...much to provide...loved ur creation

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Unwritten Soul 27 April 2012

The will power in your body protect your soul to be durable in any condition, the sensation of self embrace even hurt or tormented bold but you still standing to keep walking....so never stop in any reason for your life move smoothly in any challenge in future. Beautiful write Sharad! ! ! ! _Unwritten Soul

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