Ranjit Ravindran

Rookie (12-12-1982 / Visakhapatnam)

“I am at the hospital, call you later”


I wanted to have a medical check-up,
To ascertain how healthy I was;
The next day when the sun was up,
I went to the hospital to find out my flaws.

My mobile phone blinked to my dad’s call,
In a restricted zone forbidden to answer;
To convey this I sent a message small,
“I am at the hospital, call you later.”

A call followed to my friend waiting outside,
From my alarmed father shaken to the core;
To enquire whether he was at my bedside,
Concluding that I was hospitalized for sure!

The word ‘hospital’ was the spoilsport,
That pressed the panic button;
Had I just messaged “call you later” in short,
It would have been happily taken!


28 SEP 2009,1: 20 AM

Submitted: Sunday, September 27, 2009
Edited: Sunday, September 27, 2009

Do you like this poem?
0 person liked.
0 person did not like.

Form:


Read this poem in other languages

This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.

I would like to translate this poem »

word flags

What do you think this poem is about?

Comments about this poem (“I am at the hospital, call you later” by Ranjit Ravindran )

  • Rookie - 58 Points Brian Jani (7/7/2014 10:15:00 AM)

    The word ‘hospital’ was the spoilsport,
    That pressed the panic button; , this is fantastic poetry keep it up (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Kannan G (3/24/2010 8:21:00 AM)

    A nicely worded composition on how nicely worded all things should be. Keep writing. Best wishes. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Pradyumna Jyotir (1/14/2010 5:46:00 AM)

    This happens to us all of us all the times. The very word ' hospital ' evokes panic among us. The poem is humorous and touching at the same time. Keep up the good work. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Mandara Pookal (12/5/2009 11:38:00 PM)

    Looks like I am becoming a fan of your exceptionally expressive work. Keep writing, mandara (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Nalini Hebbar (11/20/2009 10:57:00 AM)

    the DOCOMO ad comes to mind...short and scary (Report) Reply

  • Rookie rago rago (11/10/2009 6:26:00 PM)

    nicely written and the word hospital always struck panic in us..you see I never like and use the word hospital and hospitalised both the words disliked by me..your mother`s thinking of horrible diagnosing for some other disease also true in some other cases....fine write......... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Stacey Watts (10/19/2009 10:27:00 PM)

    Oh this brought to mind an incident that happened several years ago. I was on a trip and I called home to check on my parents. When I did my dad who had many strokes in the past informed me my mother was taken to the emergency room. I was 16 hours away and he hung up the phone never telling me what happened. This piece reminded me of that. Very well done. Excellent piece. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ranjit Ravindran (10/19/2009 9:36:00 AM)

    @ Ms. Mamta Agarwal:

    I'll definetly consider that ma'am. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Mamta Agarwal (10/19/2009 7:34:00 AM)

    I like your style and humour. obviously you found your flaw- the message to your father should have been short and written after due consideration.

    very good flow, and a lesson for all

    10

    Mamta (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Samanyan Lakshminarayanan (10/18/2009 8:26:00 PM)

    a wonderful poem you take from a concerned dad...a thing that could happen to anybody
    and you have done it perfectly well (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 8 Points Anjali Sinha (10/11/2009 6:36:00 AM)

    nice,
    hilarious poem
    enjoyed it
    anjali (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ranjit Ravindran (10/3/2009 1:22:00 AM)

    @ Ms. Indira Renganathan:
    Upon asking 'why did you panic? If at all I am taken down by illness how could I ever send you an SMS that too assuring to call back later', my dad answered:
    'You got to be a parent to understand that, there's no other way I can get that into your head! ' (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 312 Points Indira Renganathan (10/2/2009 11:10:00 PM)

    Somewhere in this site I read a poem 'power of words'...it has acted true in your case...but it is the natural reflux of any parent on hearing 'am at the hospital ' to get shattered...well done Ranjit (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Vijay Menon (9/30/2009 1:43:00 AM)

    nice poem indeed how some words are misunderstood as some places fine write (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ranjit Ravindran (9/28/2009 5:51:00 AM)

    @ Ms. Marilyn Lott:
    Very true Ma'am...Its that unconditional love that keeps me going. My mom avoids the hospital for the fear that she would be diagonised for something horrible. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ranjit Ravindran (9/28/2009 4:29:00 AM)

    @ Dr. Indira Babbellapati: Exactly..but the feelings associated with the word 'hospital' overrided its intend! I Wish everyone around me were english teachers... Then I would have fewer misinterpretations! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 40 Points Indira Babbellapati (9/28/2009 4:14:00 AM)

    'i'm at THE hospital...' THE indicates u r not there as a patient...that's wht it's to be an english teacher, i suppose! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 279 Points Marilyn Lott (9/27/2009 4:49:00 PM)

    The word hospital is always scary to hear if we don't know the facts and many times because we do know the facts. The reaction you got shows how much you are loved. '10! ' Keep writing and sharing. Love your rhyming style!

    Warm Wishes,
    Marilyn (Report) Reply

Read all 18 comments »

Famous Poems

  1. Phenomenal Woman
    Maya Angelou
  2. Still I Rise
    Maya Angelou
  3. The Road Not Taken
    Robert Frost
  4. If You Forget Me
    Pablo Neruda
  5. Dreams
    Langston Hughes
  6. Annabel Lee
    Edgar Allan Poe
  7. I Know Why The Caged Bird Sings
    Maya Angelou
  8. If
    Rudyard Kipling
  9. Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening
    Robert Frost
  10. A Dream Within A Dream
    Edgar Allan Poe
Trending Poets
Trending Poems
  1. Still I Rise, Maya Angelou
  2. Dreams, Langston Hughes
  3. The Road Not Taken, Robert Frost
  4. Phenomenal Woman, Maya Angelou
  5. I Know Why The Caged Bird Sings, Maya Angelou
  6. If, Rudyard Kipling
  7. If You Forget Me, Pablo Neruda
  8. Daffodils, William Wordsworth
  9. As I Grew Older, Langston Hughes
  10. Annabel Lee, Edgar Allan Poe
[Hata Bildir]