kanav justa

Veteran Poet - 1,068 Points (Shimla)

Hole Hearted - Poem by kanav justa

i had a dream
the dream was beautiful
so i shared it with you

i had a heart
the heart was fragile
i gave it to you

you had a dream
the dream must have been beautiful
the dream was never shared

you had a heart
human heart but of stone
mine too frail to stay with you

yet it stayed
but yours went away
and left a hole in my heart

Comments about Hole Hearted by kanav justa

  • Gold Star - 37,247 Points Valsa George (1/24/2014 6:24:00 AM)

    How sad Kanava! ! Like a citadel with bullet holes, your heart is left with a hole. Who did that offense to you, after so willingly sharing everything of yours with her? She should be penalised.....! ! (Report) Reply

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  • Veteran Poet - 1,420 Points Shahzia Batool (1/13/2014 1:37:00 PM)

    an arresting title indeed and a good poem developed on it...! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,014 Points Yasmeen Khan (12/22/2013 12:32:00 AM)

    A heart in love is a fragile heart left with a hole by a the one made of stone, a unique idea. You've nicely presented pun on words! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 184 Points Karen Sinclair (12/19/2013 7:53:00 AM)

    Just pure and beautiful. Ty (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 144 Points Rubab Atwal (12/18/2013 10:37:00 AM)

    really touching, amazingly expressed... (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,225 Points Kavya . (12/16/2013 1:35:00 AM)

    excellent....the caption of the poemt itself is very catchy! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 8,208 Points Neela Nath Das (12/9/2013 4:09:00 AM)

    There is none who can heal the hurt heart! You have to mend it.Great! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 31,001 Points * Sunprincess * (12/8/2013 9:56:00 PM)

    oh kanav, I feel like you have laid your heart on the table for someone
    who was unworthy of your love...I am sorry this has happen to you...
    and I can see from this poem you have a very beautiful heart... of course
    I knew this long ago :) (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,845 Points Marie Shine (12/8/2013 3:51:00 AM)

    A very poignant write, beautifully expressed. The title is very well chosen: hole instead of whole, very creative! I like this poem very much, it is well crafted and flows as smooth as silk! Thank you for sharing, Kanav. Blessings for a very beautiful Sunday. With every good wish always... (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,259 Points Geetha Jayakumar (12/7/2013 1:07:00 PM)

    It's sad. Beautiful poem Kanav. Loved it. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, December 7, 2013

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