Hardwork Poem by Ankit Neil Sharma

Hardwork

Rating: 4.5


hardwork, the key to reign,
when everyone steals your luck
just make it the weapon gainst them,
and, they the ultimate faces blow away,

hardwork keeps my soul fresh
and my body away from the illness
its the only jewellery, that i possess,
the reason, God has provided it to me.

If you have the courage to outshine yourself,
be with it, have it, be proud of yourself.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 09 July 2013

i think hardwork is hardly ever one word. yes, i see my spell-checker does NOT like it. Hardwork is now underlined in RED and if i type hard work it is not. but i understand! that is more important. i also think you use too many commas. i don't understand the line: ....they the ultimate faces blow away, i almost told you that you misspelled jewellery but then i thought this guy lives in India, so i checked it out and came up with this to paste: ......Jewelry vs. jewellery For the noun referring to articles, especially of gold, silver, or precious stones, used for personal adornment, jewelry is the preferred spelling in American English. Jewellery is preferred in varieties of English from outside North America. Both spellings appear in Canadian English, but jewelry prevails by a two-to-one margin. i DO live in the u.s.a. but my spell-checker did not mind jewellery. i enjoyed: .....hardwork keeps my soul fresh and my body away from the illness its the only jewellery, that i possess, the reason, God has provided it to me. ...though i would spell its (sic) as it's, for it is. and also i would spell gainst as 'gainst (for against) but this time my spell-checker underlines both gainst and 'gainst! we poets should be allowed a little leeway though in our writing! ! ! i assume in the lines: .....If you have the courage to outshine yourself, be with it, have it, be proud of yourself.........the it refers to hardwork. well done. i hope all your hard work pays off in your life...........and not necessarily with money or just money. thanks for sharing, and since this poem was short i will read at least one more, especially since you sent your request twice, asking me to read.

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Unwritten Soul 08 July 2013

Thanks for invitation, and here welcome to join PHunter, and be a part of us in this nice community...Good write Ankit, do more poem so you will get more to try and new way to have in the next poem! _SOul

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James Mclain 08 July 2013

Hard work is the magic key. To all success...iip

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David Wood 08 July 2013

Welcome to poemhunter. A fine poem about life. Keep it up. I suggest you read other poets on Poemhunter to see their styles and what we all write about. Well done.

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