simran arora

Rookie (22-july-1996 / gurgon)

Freedom...... - Poem by simran arora

For me,
my freedom is at the priority,
conbination of adjustment,
and compromises in majority....


For me,
my freedom is my wisdom,
and wants to rais me up from all critic,
with a working mind, out of room....


For me,
my freedom is to bound me,
and not to set me free,
it dont mean to rule the streets,
but to build a safe field...


For me,
my freedom dont mean to disgide,
but work on me,
and on my passion for high lights,
it dont mean to fallow the black shadows,
but to grow and colour our own rose....


For me,
my freedom is not be fool anyone,
but to proud someone,
and to prove everyone,
that,
my freedom dont mean to rule the clouds,
but to land on a safe tree,
aside of all pain,
under a sky of proud,
for what i did, what i am.....


Comments about Freedom...... by simran arora

  • Gold Star - 6,916 Points Hazel Durham (7/6/2013 11:36:00 AM)

    Freedom is about the truth we find within ourselves! !
    I agree with Kanniappan if you put it in poetic form, you show great promise! (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 10,063 Points Heather Wilkins (7/1/2013 2:59:00 PM)

    a great write on freedom. Enjoyed the read. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,784 Points Wahab Abdul (7/1/2013 10:53:00 AM)

    good write.. poignant... true to heart... love it (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Anamika Jalan (6/30/2013 9:15:00 AM)

    nice suggestion
    but a well read poem (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 347 Points David Wood (6/30/2013 5:54:00 AM)

    I agree with Kinniappan below. At the moment it is prose. Read other poets first and then write. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,896 Points Kanniappan Kanniappan (6/23/2013 12:48:00 PM)

    Dear Simran Arora,
    I read your topic 'Freedom' I understand your interest. But can you arrange the same in small lines and paragraphs? as follows:

    For me,
    my freedom is at the priority,
    combination of adjustment,
    and compromises in majority....

    For me,
    my freedom is my wisdom,
    And wants to raise me up from all critic,
    with a working mind, out of room.... (likewise) .

    Congratulations. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Survi Sharma (6/23/2013 4:27:00 AM)

    nice poem
    as dhawan said
    great write and mature one (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 185 Points Vizard Dhawan (6/23/2013 3:45:00 AM)

    mature write
    inner sense meaning poem
    written good
    i like it (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, June 23, 2013

Poem Edited: Friday, July 26, 2013


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