Fatal Fall Poem by Vijay Sai R

Fatal Fall



Platinum spots in a black blanket,
Weeping sky pouring lazy drizzles,
Around eleven in midnight,
The tiny child,
Celebrating birthday,
With her kith and kin,
Playing here and there,
Down her apartment,
Never she know,
That she could slip herself,
Deep into the abandoned borewell,
Everyone searched her helter skelter,
Finally suspecting her inside the deadly trap,
Fire fighters and policemen,
Recovering her after almost forty eight hours,
Only to find her no more,
A victim of asphyxiation,
A blossoming flower,
Nipped in bud,
Let we all pray,
No such incidents,
Happen in future.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Alex Badion 29 November 2012

nice poem...please keep writing ^^

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S.zaynab Kamoonpuri 30 November 2012

Oh no a sad narrative poem. Coincidentally a very same ting hapend to my mamu's child in india. She drownd in a water tank or hole on her birthday. Sadening but yor poem is remarkably presentd! Kudos.

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Rishit Desai 30 November 2012

The poem brings out the emotions very well. Good work.

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Shinobi Poet 01 December 2012

not bad, not bad at all, it doesn't exacly rime the way i usuauly prefur poetry to but it did have a more then fare plot that togged a emotional string so i give it 4 out of 5 stars

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Queeny Gona 01 December 2012

Very narrative and could feel the pain of loosing blosoming bud!

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Tirupathi Chandrupatla 20 June 2013

Poem bringing attention to a serious problem. Along with prayer, we need to take steps to prevent such accidents. Thank you.

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Devon P. John 25 January 2013

TWIMC.... accept my sympathy... great pen Vijay Sai... keep it up! ! !

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Franca Kenneth 14 January 2013

Great poem. I felt sorry for the child and I pray such incident won't happen in the future.

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Yours Forever X 12 January 2013

wow! what a seriously dark poem but then again you should read some of mine. you'll be suprised im only sixteen because i only ever write from experience.

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Goodness Tchibueze 03 January 2013

Great mind...great thought...great work...great poem! I love this

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Vijay Sai R

Vijay Sai R

Trichy, South India
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