I like the way the joy of the children at school, was incorporated with some of its ills and failures with the ghastly event that will effect the lives of all at the school! Very nice write my brother!
You are a wonderful poet, with a good command of English literary craft. Great attention to detailed through your descriptive or explicit writing style. However, I would also love to get a glimpse of the implicit side of your vivid imagery.
Alliteration is a great poetic tool when it is used sparingly, but can be viewed as burdensome when forced.
I like this poem, but found it to be somewhat forced, however, Vijay is a fresh voice. I like most of what he writes.
And I will continue to read all that he writes.