Fast Food Poem by Delicate Heart
Fast Food
'Beauty was made from her eyes.
Soon they move, I fly into the skies.
Your charming eyes are my light.
When truely at night I lose my sight.
Without their lights the moon.
Would be darkish quite soon.
Wherever I see your eyes.
My heart stops his soul cries.
When I stray and go away.
By your eyes I find my way.
Your eyes'beauty feeds all.
Nature, human still their soul'.
'With every motion of your lip.
My heartbeats, they will whip.
Watching them when in touch.
Inner love grows, oh! so much'.
yout rhyming is pretty good but lack of meter interrupts the smooth flow read aloud
this is a good poem when someone reads the title they'll think its about food but its about love.......10
observant...converse in the delicate itsy bitsy of love language hiding behind a huge cheese burger very nice liked the following remarks too Ben Gieske (5/9/2009 9: 12: 00 AM) Fast FOOd - your title is interesting. I imagine the OO as possibly being two open mouths ready to eat the fast food, or two wide-open eyes filled with wonder, or one of them being the moon. cheers
This is a lovely poem, quite an intense love. A nicely composed piece, pleasure to read
Fast FOOd - your title is interesting. I imagine the OO as possibly being two open mouths ready to eat the fast food, or two wide-open eyes filled with wonder, or one of them being the moon.
The sentiment is very romantic and seems to depict the first rush of love. Do you want a proper critique of the poem as a poem or just on the meaning of the verse? Ruth
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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i love it it is a really good poem much to me thay go with my feelings