Ali Adamson


Difference! - Poem by Ali Adamson

Vast as ocean, apart as grains
I could remember...
no songs of love,
no voice of hate
So... warm during day
and... cool in night
... you stretched your arm initiating a relation! ! !
in the next moment...
I slipped off your hand...
When I was SAND!

..........

My tired soul
and endless journey
unbearable distance... it is my love!
If this is my life!
I am to die...
split up myself... pieces into pieces
approaching my love
with countless kisses
bleeding fast, screaming loud...
When I am CLOUD!


Comments about Difference! by Ali Adamson

  • Gold Star - 9,888 Points Heather Wilkins (10/13/2014 5:25:00 PM)

    my tired soul and endless journey unbearable distance but somehow we must make this journey there are times I feel the same way but I endure (Report) Reply

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  • Freshman - 659 Points V P Mahur (3/25/2014 2:08:00 PM)

    Dear Ali,
    Thanks for your kind comments. this poem reflects the agony and pain of love. Nicely wrtten.
    Thanks again. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 22,619 Points Valsa George (3/12/2014 11:30:00 PM)

    Vast stretch of sand shows enormity and rain bearing cloud indicates life! Let your love be vast and life giving! ! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,962 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (12/27/2013 4:16:00 AM)

    Sand slips and cloud breaks up and disperses. Let me be something different to approach love. Nice imagination. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 829 Points Shahzia Batool (12/19/2013 12:33:00 PM)

    the vastness of the Nature is the paraphernalia of your art of poetry...a vast canvas! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Farah Aliah (12/4/2009 6:54:00 AM)

    Okay....fine...and sweet tooo..
    10++++++++++ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sandhya S N (5/13/2009 4:31:00 AM)

    I liked the similies sand and cloud
    good imaginations
    regards
    sandhya (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 382 Points Ravi A (5/12/2009 11:17:00 AM)

    Sand and cloud...The symbols are carefully chosen. Good. I liked it. At your age, love poems are natural for you. 'Cool in the night'. Kindly re-write as 'Cool at night'. This is what my teacher says from the corner of my mind! . Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Uzma Jamil (5/11/2009 1:32:00 PM)

    ur thoughts r deep, useemnlg having depth. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Carol Gall (5/9/2009 3:48:00 AM)

    very good poem i look forward to others (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Surayya Abbas (5/4/2009 2:56:00 PM)

    Good creation.Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Kelvin Karani (5/4/2009 4:30:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem there. I'll have to print this one (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Hanaya Sausan Kamil (5/1/2009 5:30:00 AM)

    you are right mr/mrs nightingale
    THOUGHTFUL PIECE
    but its lovely. i like this kind.
    just dont sink to deep mr ali
    you should give us some spare space to breathe
    excellent. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 59 Points PERSIAN NIGHTINGALE (4/30/2009 1:14:00 PM)

    thoughtful piece, thanks for sharing (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 4,571 Points Rm. Shanmugam Chettiar (4/30/2009 9:30:00 AM)

    it is my wish that you write some romantic poems to compensate yor serious thinking. poem is good.shan (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 8 Points Anjali Sinha (4/30/2009 3:07:00 AM)

    wowwwww the difference
    yes i could feel it
    first the grainy grizzly sand
    and then the soft cumulus clouds
    awesome! ! ! !
    -10 anjali
    (do read mine A FALLING STAR) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sandhya S N (4/30/2009 12:37:00 AM)

    nice to read but found difficult to make out
    keep go on regards
    sandhya (Report) Reply

  • Rookie djean Whitney (4/29/2009 9:23:00 PM)

    Don't know what just happened, Sorry.

    I love it! ! Sad but, beautiful and romantec -great write! Thanks for sharing! 10+ (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 554 Points Seema Chowdhury (4/29/2009 6:05:00 PM)

    nice and deep thoughts. nice to read it.thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 26 Points Joseph Poewhit (4/29/2009 1:00:00 PM)

    Has a deep outpouring of inner feelings, toward a loved one. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, April 20, 2009

Poem Edited: Tuesday, April 21, 2009


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