The Lonely Heart... Poem by sagar patil.
The Lonely Heart...
loneliness, this merciless loneliness
came with u, ur memories come u
let spring come again n again
i remembered again
the empty paths of the heart that adorned
the lonely heart....
it cried...heart cried....
the moon n sun are still there it is that sky
life is even passing by the world is passing by
i am ur i am in my self
the heart is full of sorrow
without u how can i live
grant me ur advice...
life has brought me to such a path
now fro ur shadow, i have become seprated
the symbol of ur memories are scattered every where
ur shadow is in every one of my things
its u stay in me always
u r near u r far
what is this jealousy
memories becoming tears....
embedded in ur eyes
memories becoming a laughter
even come on this lips.
This is a good poem, it could be a great poem but the use of ur u is lazy and English is such a beautiful language with so many lovely words Don't mangle it Love it and caress it like a lover. Use it to its full extent be brave, be bold. I see so much potential in your poetry don't take the easy path. Forgive me for being so hard. Thanks for sharing. BB : O)
vey beautiful heartfelt lament of loneliness... love is in your cards little btother... keep writig your beautiful poetry.
A lonely heart is no picnic my friend. It can only find solace in love. Thanks for the write.
Soul is right. Soon you will see the light of happiness dear brother.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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5/4/2024 5:39:30 PM # 1.0.0.1119
Be ready to get separated from loneliness because soon what will taking over is only happiness, so be ready any where anytime soon, are you ready? ...cheers_Soul