The Hag Poem by Elisabeth Wingle

The Hag

Rating: 4.8


I woke up this morning
Glanced in the mirror
Then without warning
The old hag appears

She looked at me closely
And then rolled her eyes
Sized me up, mostly
And then she just sighs

Used all my make-up, true
Drank most of my tea.
And when she was through
She looked just like me!

Elisabeth Wingle
9-20-15

Sunday, September 20, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: aging,humor
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kim Barney 26 April 2016

I had a long comment almost finished and then I don't know what key I accidentally pushed and it all disappeared and I couldn't get it back. I will try again. This is a great poem. It made me laugh. I always wonder where that ugly old man in my mirror comes from. This is NOT free verse, in spite of what my friend Wes Vogler said. Verses two and three are perfectly rhymed in the pattern ABAB. Verse one is more or less the same, except that the rhyme is not quite perfect. MORNING and WARNING are O.K. together, and there is a partial rhyme with MIRROR and APPEARS. If I could give this a 9.5 I would, but I can't, so I will give it a ten instead.

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Elisabeth Wingle 26 April 2016

Thanks Kim, I think we found your first comments! I appreciate your support. I have a newer poem called Vim and Vigor, check it out and let me know what you think Lisa

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Wes Vogler 07 January 2016

Oh-oh I am not a fan of free verse but this caught my fancy. You have a way with words young lady I will never give free verse a ten. Lacks discipline

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Spock The Vegan 15 January 2016

But Wes, it's not free verse, it's completely versed and deseves a 10.

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Elisabeth Wingle 16 January 2016

Thanks for the support, Spock the vegan! I am curious about your name. Is it for Dr Spock the pediatrician or Spock the Vulcan... Live long and prosper!

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Bri Edwards 27 April 2017

second visit here. i still got a chuckle at the ending! ;) :) please don't come to our front door UNTIL you've used up ALL of your make-up! we have tea. now i'll slap this fun poem into my/our May 2017 showcase for PH poets. thanks. drop me a line sometime; don't forget the worm. bri :) :)

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Sathyanarayana M V S 12 August 2016

Hahaha! I read your poems. Small and sweet. Simple ideals so neatly presented

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Bri Edwards 19 May 2016

Cutesy. I go through the same routine each morning! But with coffee. To MyPoemList. I might change 2 tiny parts to make 'smoother' rhyming. Bri :)

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Elisabeth Wingle 16 May 2016

Thanks Tom, it's nice to meet you. Any friend of Wes's is a friend f mine! I'll look forward to reading you poetry!

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Tom Billsborough 16 May 2016

That's the funniest poem of the day and it's late evening here in the UK. I think we both appeared in Wes's Doodling. which I found after reading your Doodle. And I only gave you a miserable nine. So I'll make up for it with a ten here! Your poem deserves it. It's really brightened up the evening. Thanks

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