! ! That Day, When No One's There, I Stand At That Street! ! Poem by kite remedy

! ! That Day, When No One's There, I Stand At That Street! !

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That day,
when no one's there,
I stand at that street.
Engulfed by the morning breeze,
and wondering,
wondering,
'why am I here
when you're not even near? '
People passing me by,
or it's me passing them by?
Concern it's nothing.
Up there the cloudless sky's watching,
it does with no sound,
but I surely know.
It's just the same probably,
empty, lonely.
This street while quite windy,
so few people just here.
Now maybe just two.
Three if there were you.
Those two now leave,
holding hands and pecking cheeks.
I downgrade my face,
no one's hand is there,
no one's hand I hold in my palm,
a little cold, not warm.
That day,
when there's no one there,
I stand at that street
and know what loneliness means..

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Alaa ... 01 February 2009

it is beautiful... painful but beautiful, i love the description

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Bob Blackwell 01 February 2009

A lovely description of hurt and loneliness, you write well.

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Alison Cassidy 31 January 2009

A poignant piece, written from sad experience, I suspect. Your delivery is very evocative. My only query is the line 'I downgrade my face'. To downgrade is to reduce in importance, whereas I suspect you mean downcast or look down. The final few lines are particularly poetic. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Seema Aarella 31 January 2009

The picture of loneliness...very real, its a pain to be alone when others are with their mates....fine write!

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