Serpentine Abyss Poem by Nika McGuin

Serpentine Abyss

Rating: 2.8


Black is a word,
If you were in a car
it would make you swerve
Thoughts going through your head
the only thing you can see, is the color red
Demons floating in nearby skies
Mama never did sing lullabies
The darkness overflows your vision
you can't remember why you're here
what is your mission?
scanning for memories
but you have none
the only thing you can hear,
is something loud, like the sound of a gun
your shadow follows me
I tried to run away
the only thing I can hear
is the stepping of feet

From the age of five
I'd been taught to submit to the beast,
that I must quell my anger and resentment
and I'd lived with it, suffered its taunts daily
until at last, hope surfaced - a lucid phantasm
with its serpentine tongue an oath was sworn,
that the creature could be vanquished
soon, I'd be free of the cell I'd grown accustomed to
like a fool fully garnished in naivete,
I began to reminisce about the way my life was
before the monster's abhorred presence made itself known
but hope too is an intruder
and like all serpents, it slithers and lies
the beast's dark shadow hunts me still

Tuesday, March 4, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: dark
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
A collaboration with Ash Flame(aka Kwaye Brooks) , a family member of mine, the first verse was born out of his poetic genius(at the age of 13!) Expect poems and raps from him soon, he is also on PH. This is his first poem by the way.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kanav Justa 08 March 2014

... again.. a wonderful write... nice style of writing....

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Kwaye Brooks 06 March 2014

My badd everyone i got kinda confused with the nickname and the other

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Daniel Brick 05 March 2014

A 13-year old co-wrote this impressive nightmare poem! No wonder you say Expect poems and raps from him soon. The first stanza pulled into this poem, actually the title first because it reminded me of a old but impressive Hollywood film called SNAKE PIT which is another way of saying SERPENTINE ABYSS. The first stanza shows how there can be terrible things in our lives we have to live with day after day; we can't get rid of them or escape them so they haunt us continually. The second stanza amplifies that daily experience: The beast's dark shadow hunts me still is a powerful closing; it doesn't end! But the most striking line for me was I'd been taught to submit to the beast. What a burden to carry to carry. Give Ash Flame my compliments for his creativity.

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