Divine Showers Poem by Vijay Sai R

Divine Showers

Rating: 4.4


Another day
Another disappointment
Haplessly dethroned
Helplessly ignored
Teased and tormented
Not a point to prove
I accepted the cause
For no fault of mine
And moved on
Reminding myself repeatedly
This moment is never permanent in life
Shattered and tarnished
I tread along the wayside
Yelling aloud! Is there anyone who could hear me?
Twin eyes soon drenched in swimming pool
Just then, little droplets
Pouring into divine showers
Wiped away all my tears
I thanked my heavenly friend
Feeling fresh and rejuvenated
I got up
Saying to myself
There’s always another chance!
To prove
The hunter too can become the hunted!

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Rajkumar Mukherjee 04 October 2009

Dear Vijay, Thanks for your invite. It's a good poem. The message is loud and clear.Choice of words and rhythm is perfectly maintained.I feel two changes will make the flow of your poem better, this is just a suggestion, choice is yours, In L-14-'-Is there anyone who could hear' may be changed to-'Is there anybody there? ' In L-19-'I thanked my heavenly friend' to 'I thanked Heaven' I liked the poem. rated at 9. keep on writing Rajkumar

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This is refreshing poetic rain that emerges out of the dark cloud of torment. I really like this poem.

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Munia Khan 05 October 2009

I got up saying to myself there's always another chance......So True n so inspirational....Wonderful poetic diction.10+

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Philosophy of a DewyFlower 06 October 2009

there is no life without hope and there is no hope without life... ups and downs that's life... when you're in a tunnel surely you will glance a ray this is the HOPE, he asks for you to run and run and run until you reach the SUN... your DIVINE SHOWERS is well expressed!

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Breanni Sharon Mcduffey 06 October 2009

This poem was just brillant i loved it, it was wonderful keep up the good work :)

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Yours Forever X 12 January 2013

its a lovely poem it gives hope to the hopeless

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Queeny Gona 15 December 2012

Desperate quest for success is finally met and it is the beauty of this write!

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Goddy Nana-mens 11 August 2012

Great poem, Vijai. I love the ending. very inspiring

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Gan Chennai 23 May 2010

Beautiful poem. When we keep our eyes wide open (probably brain) , opportunities are unlimited. It's like stars in sky, we have to scale, just, the Terrace to view. Wait for the cloud to remove veil, all disappointments will vanish. I write this, that all our expressions reflect our true inner feelings. I write every expressions literally. I take every expressions literally. Nice expressions.

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Michael Brock 21 April 2010

Your poetry is wonderfully full and alive, you give strong and intense feelings and emotions, your visual wording is well done. This is a wonderful poem, very intense. thanks for sharing Michael

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Vijay Sai R

Vijay Sai R

Trichy, South India
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