You are the softness of my life
my only refuge from hurt an strife
Alone my soul aches, cold as ice
you by my side its warm an nice
as if the sun’s no more warm
the sky is cast and out to harm
the way ahead an alien stretch
finding my feet an uphill fret
all over the worlds riches abound
I'm lost when you're not around
on impulse I reach to hold you close
you are my fix my healing dose
With you gone I am bleak an queer
with you around, as blithe as a deer
alone I cower an skulk in shadows
with you by me to dance in meadows
your smile itself is home and hearth
that gives me life and its worth
you outa sight I can scarcely breathe
my thoughts then shift to floral wreaths
(Islamabad)
(April 08,2009)
The difficulty in always finding the correct rhymes is a profound challenge for most poets. I admire you for attempting to write basic rhythm and rhyme. I want to encourage you to continue. But you do have a way to go in that regard and it will take time for you to get there. I wish you well. Overall, a solid effort. GW62
Thank you for sharing this poem because it perfectly describes my best friend.
For me the heart of your poem is on impulse I reach to hold you close....you are my fix my healing dose so natural, easy and relate-able
wonderfully penned. nice and honestly sweet lines. very addictive lines to read.... Like it so muchhhh! ! ! !
she is indeed your life...she is the air you need, to breathe....beautiful Saadat...
hmm....we seek the loved one in our solitude and moments of joy......flows well...
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
hi.. very nice piece emotionally penned....i liked it thanks for sharing: }