Could I walk this city
every day
and never find the same place twice?
Could I find myself in that
new location?
Take the risk
you remember forever.
The significant moment.
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2. This doesn't work. You cannot talk about a significant moment in a poem without showing the reader what it is.
It seems disjointed. I feel the first part is about something different than the second. Perhaps it needs a transition or clarification.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
It seems like to different poems or at least a beginning and a end. But I think you need to put in a middle that will tie the two together.