Tomorrow Poem by Leah Ayliffe

Tomorrow

Rating: 3.0


Sparklers.
Fireworks.
Fairies and wildflowers.

Christmas lights and falling white snow.

Summer freedom.
Bicycle rides.
Corner stores and school parks.

Movies, literature and television series that said all she never could.

Ribbons and bows.
Sleepovers and Mario Party until the moon faded and the sun rose.

I guess you could say it was all the small things that kept her living, kept her wishing on stars.

Like how tomorrow could be the day he comes to take her far away.

Thursday, October 13, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: dream,magic
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Daniel Brick 18 November 2016

The heart of this poem is in the title which dramatically returns in the last stanza with the RESCUE BY A SHINING HERO. But you could also call this poem YESTERDAY because it is a list poem of remembered details of the past. And these are fond memories, invested with considerable nostalgia and no trace of bitterness. I sort of felt the list poem inside of this poem was a PARADISE LOST. But this lost paradise is not a place you can return to but a time that has vanished: it lives only in stationary memories. // I'm taking your poem apart looking for something consoling, but you wrote a poem with its own integrity. My task is a fool's errand. Your memory of the past evokes Wordsworth's SPOTS OF TIME, which highlight his personal growth over time. In a sense, this poem anchors your feelings; we need such anchors because feelings tend to run amok, unlike thoughts which tend to get heavy and ponderous. I don't know if my comment helps you with any insight into your situation, but I know I am going to write a similar List Poem to anchor by roiling feelings. Thanx much for the inspiration! !

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