The Newbie Poem by albert gray

The Newbie

Rating: 5.0


A person with no status

Somebody with nothing to do

He learns to talk to people

And yearns to be in a group

So look back on your life

And you'll realize you were once a noob too

So because in this life it's give and take

Why not give the average noob a break

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Allemagne Roßmann 06 August 2009

Nice rhythm voted 10 and experts below have their nobler comments....

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Lynn Glover 05 August 2009

Albert: Fifty two years ago I wrote my first poem and I was just as excited as you are now. This is a good start and I want to encourage you to continue. Let the rythem flow and build the structure of your poetry. And remember you are not a noob but a young struggling poet. Keep up the good work, this is nice. Your friend in poetry. Lynn

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Ency Bearis 05 August 2009

well implied write being a neophyte...it's a test of your life how you presented in first try...well let's see...keep on writing and welcome to PH..

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