'' The Aliens Were Dense '' Poem by Bri Mar

'' The Aliens Were Dense ''



As the aliens descended,
Would our ways be mended?
As their intelligence was truly superior,
To us it felt splendid,
Our hand we extended,
Though some's motives were purely ulterior.

No need to hide,
They'd be on our side,
Initially that's what we thought,
They couldn't be snide,
They must know of pride,
Surely, they couldn't be bought.

Being part of the throng,
We tried to remain strong,
But our pleas they totally ignored,
Where they belong,
I'm afraid we got wrong,
With the majority they said we are bored.

With the one per cent,
Our intentions we'll vent,
We'll stick with the rich and your leaders,
With malicious intent,
Our greed they'll ferment,
Like us they are known as life's bleeders.

They asked, what's the fuss,
What's to discuss,
Being superior we don't deal with plebs,
We class you as puss,
You're nothing like us,
We'll never get caught up in your webs.

Intelligent? We said,
You're all off your head,
You'll come down to Earth with a bump.
Watch where you tread,
Your lives hang by a thread,
Negotiating with Putin and Trump.

Soon the truth dawned,
There was no golden pond,
The whole thing was just a pretence,
Of those they were fond,
Our visitors were conned,
In Reality,

‘' The Aliens Were Dense ‘'

Friday, October 5, 2018
Topic(s) of this poem: greed
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
If our evolution is a gauge to how we've progressed then we are in trouble if aliens are thousands or millions of years more advanced.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 14 March 2019

" We class you as puss, You're nothing like us, " could you have meant " pus" ? ? " There was no golden pond, " ...could be a reference to 1981 movie On Golden Pond? ? compared to my rhyme schemes, yours are trickier i feel; i'll stick with mine! nice job, i hope all readers understand meaning of " dense" here. to MyPoemList. and i plan to include in my upcoming April 2019 showcase. thanks. bri :)

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Brian Markey 15 March 2019

Thanks Bri, I like experimenting with differing rhyme forms the more difficult and challenging the better, but I've yet to master them, that's what writing's for I guess, I did mean pus, if they don't understand the meaning of dense in this context it's understandable. Thanks again for your many comments.

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