Terrible Night Poem by Brandie .....
Terrible Night
On that terrible day, I still can never forget,
All of the horrible thoughts, running through my head,
Ow my god, is he alive or is he dead,
As I run toward my dad, I see those big blue eyes open wide,
Looking at me I knew he was alright,
Standing still I'm blank and speechless, I still don't know how to get through this,
Here come a man walking toward me, he held me tight,
and told me he's going to be alright,
As the squad pulled up, they lifted him high, right into the squad,
as he said good-bye,
Riding to the hospital, was the worst part of all,
I wasn't their for him, i wasn't their at all,
I knew it wasn't over it had just began, the nightmare of my life,
a broken roller coaster ride,
When we arrived, I saw him again,
he held onto me tight as he said I'm alright,
I felt better after seeing him, he looked as if the car had ran over him,
The car hit him at 45 and I'm not sure how he survived,
but don't get me wrong I'm glad to have him,
because his guardian angel was flying beside him,
With a broken leg and rods and pins, he's still here with us and I'm glad he is.
(This poem is based on the true story of what i saw the night my father was hit by a car. I wrote this poem from my heart, and he is doing alright.)
that was a touching piece..written well without loosig grip..your dad must be very lucky to have a daughter like you
its diffidently full of emotion and real emotion too very good write
this poem is specail, yes. the emotions are tru.. with you tellignme i coudl see it was written form the heart. very good. all the best to you popz and family.
Excellent! , Emotive words and this exciting up tempo from the dark context narrative.Also id like to add, i think your very good for your age=) .x
A perfect narration, keeps the reader glued to it. It displays great poetic skill with perfect rhythm and flow. It never loses its human touch. I hope your father is back to normal. Thanks for sharing. CP
Hi Brandie, It is a great poem if you could make it more concise. Loose the repetition of the same points that you've furnished in different words and add specifics... dramatic theme that keeps you reading to the end... Deva
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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Brandy you have captured all of the drama and suspense and tragedy well, and I believe over time you will edit and re-organize the flow to be even a more provocative accounting of your epidose with this family disaster....