Shiftless Under Black Eyes Poem by Raven Rasputin

Shiftless Under Black Eyes

Rating: 5.0


All alone
It’s what I’ve dreaded
I make you what you are,
You’re tightly threaded

And you, you mold me too
Just look and see
And now it seems we’re never far
From shifting who we ought to be

Color me in,
Make me green and bright
On the inside there is only tar
But who can see without a light?

And when it’s sunny,
My mood will shift
To forget this insight that will mar
This darkness; it will be a gift

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kim Barney 10 December 2014

I've read all ten of your poems and this is your best one. Fantastic rhyme scheme. A ten from me.

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Chuck Audette 16 June 2008

Long time no poems? Good to see a new one. Liked your rhymes and also the strength in your revealing words. -chuck

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Danny Fairfield 27 April 2008

Wow! I some what felt you on that poem

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