Red Moon Poem by Leah Ayliffe

Red Moon

Rating: 3.0


Sitting in the backyard
as the sun sets in the pink sky
and the dark blue begins to unveil the stars

the noise of a beer can opening,
that sizzle cap sound,
illuminates the forecast of a divine night

Tropical deep house exudes the enchantment of our beating hearts
as we talk about the non existence of the days before and the days to come
we somehow survived

when the company we adore races towards us around the corner of the house,
home again,
two more cans sizzle free while two young boys dance on the lengthy grass
barefoot, singing the newest hit song of the week

we laugh and take pictures before they run off yelling good night,
Leaving just three girls giggling on the swing set
realizing the moon is red beyond the fields of lush green

'I don't know how much you've been drinking... but I see the red moon too'
'my darling, tell me, are we crazy or is the moon red? '

We are crazy,
but it was red.
A strawberry moon,
a juicy gorgeous fruit shining in darkness.

I get scared that one day my memory won't stay true
and will forget these details..
one of many dreamy times spent in this land away from real

The delicious evening of drinking and playing in the backyard
underneath the strangest sight of a strawberry moon.

Sunday, June 14, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: memory
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Teresa Wright 10 August 2016

Very strong first half of this poem in imagery and detail. it weakens, for me at least, past We are crazy... in form & detail, but not in message/story.

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Daniel Brick 12 July 2015

Pink - Red - Strawberry are the primary colors of this poem, and they both disguise and reveal the principal object - the MOON. This is the vital experience of THE NIGHT that the Latin-derived word L-U-N-A-C-Y identifies. Today's meaning has been debased to insane in the clinical sense. But your poem preserves the ancient notion that the moon inspires the poetry of living, makes us poets, we breath the vapors of the moon and our consciousness is heightened. Of course, I'm spelling out in critical prose what you express in evocative and persuasive imagery. Oh, I love it! I'm there on that lawn, soaking in the moonlight, enjoying the warmth of companions, letting thoughts come and go, but not letting any worry or doubt sabotage the Moon's magic. The challenge is to be able to access this memory in the daylight and that's what this poem makes possible. You can recharge your emotions with this vision.

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