Rabbits Poem by Tan Pratonix

Rabbits

Rating: 5.0


At the mouth of the river where tall grasses grow,
Where no hunter hunts with hounds nor bugles blow,
Where the carefreeness of life lets rabbits roll -
My thoughts go scampering softly down a rabbit hole.

And there they crouch where one with silver knife
Prods them into submissive shape and waits
To cut the gay blue carefreeness of life
Into a vicious haze of pain and hate.

Then with smiling red eyes and silver teeth they go,
My thoughts, to where the tall green grasses grow;
And hurling forward with a savage scream
They shock the rabbits from their rolling dream.

A flurry of frightened faces in the river:
My thoughts are mad with red and silver teeth,
And mad as frightened faces shiver
And swirl toward their sudden death.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Gina Onyemaechi 02 February 2006

Rich description, distressing violence. Strong stuff. Kind regards, Gina.

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Fred Rik Kesner 18 April 2006

There is such depth in your writing.

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Simone Inez Harriman 16 February 2006

Awesome Tan (10 from me)

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Emma Johnson 13 February 2006

The way you make your frantic and red-eyed thoughts mirror and echo the eventual horror of rabbits when they are caught in a 'haze of pain and hate' is absolutely brilliant and original.

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Bridgid Patrick 09 February 2006

This is very powerful work..sincerely. bridgid x

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Lawrence S. Pertillar 02 February 2006

I like this! It makes a statement that we all are victims of those we seek us out in the comforts of our 'nests' for sport and selfishness. L

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